Press Yourself Into Me - Let Me Feel Your Breathing - (McFly) Fletcher/Jones - Standalone

[colourful_words]

Title: Press Yourself Into Me - Let Me Feel Your Breathing
Author: coloured_dream
Part: 1/1 (standalone, 1,102 words)
Pairing: Fletcher/Jones
Genre: Angst
Rating: PG-13
Summery: Keep watching and praying that you may not come into temptation; the spirit is willing, but the flesh is weak
Disclaimer: All untrue, just a work of fiction.
A/N: For the random word

Comments

[silverferret89]

And I love this, as you know. There's rarely any religious fics written, and there really should be more, because I love this.
I love they way he beats himself down, wraps his head around the fact that a confession will make it all go away (the sin) but it doesn't, just gets it out, and Tom's no confession chair, he's temptation.
So yea, I love this, Amanda, really do.

And he’ll feel the burning heat, the wave that washes through him and he’ll wish he could find something, a way to make it all stop.
oh Danny <3

[colourful_words]

Thank you honey, I really am glad you like it.

The religious implications were more of an undertone in the end, it was more about the temptation (the sin) that Tom is and that Danny tries to escape from. Its proves kind of pointless, telling him won’t make the temptation weaken, won’t cleanse the psyche.

Thank you, bb :D

[colourful_words]

Aww thank you. I changed my writing style for this so I’m glad the fragility comes across, I wanted Danny to seem ever so vulnerable, weakened by the temptation Tom provides.

The religious undertones were only ever supposed to be slight. Danny was just supposed to see temptation as a sin wearing away his defences. Anyway, I’m glad you enjoyed :)

[imagination55]

Oh, man.

He feels spineless for giving in, if he could he would turn, would walk

DANNY. :( I almost want to feel angry at Tom for being so tempting to poor Jones lol. And how Danny just beats himself up so much, its heartbreaking.

I'm trying to think if you've ever used this style before, but it hits me hard. Its different. Apart from the angsty topic (because I'm a great, big wuss at heart), I think I like it, heh. Also, actually loved how you interpretated the random word the most. :D

I'm gonna go lick my wounds in the corner now lol.

[colourful_words]

I sort of changed my writing style just a little. I thought the smaller blocks of writing was (hopefully) more impacting. I feel it’s slightly more evasive, like I don’t really explain enough. I’m not really sure if it pays off, or if I’m going to use the same style again, I quite like deep descriptions. This was more of an experiment piece.

Thanks. I had another idea for the word but it seemed sort of simple. I’m glad you liked, though :)

[niceandloud]

It took me a while to understand the religious point of view, but in the end it's quite sweet. I like the way you took it and made it look nice. Honestly, religion supports love, and love doesn't choose sex, age, or looks, not even you can say what is the right way to show love, so it's not like loving is a sin...
poor danny (L) this is cute and well-written good work *claps* :)

[colourful_words]

The religious insinuation was really only meant to be an undertone and then it was only meant to highlight how Danny saw temptation as a sin. It wasn’t really about Danny seeing loving as a sin; it was just the temptation itself, how it was wrapping him up and pulling him in.

Thank you for reading and commenting <3

[elisa88]

I really liked this, specially the way it's written coz it transmits every single feeling to perfection.

my fave part has to be Tom Fletcher is one vice, one attraction, one burning temptation he just can’t break. No matter how hard he tries.

it's so wrong, it's right.
great s/a. =)

[colourful_words]

Thank you, I’m very happy you enjoyed the read :)