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Fic - "The Tempest Takes"

Nov 30, 2010 23:01

Title: The Tempest Takes
Author: colonel_bastard
Characters/Fandom: Jean Havoc, Shou Tucker, mentions of Roy Mustang. Fullmetal Alchemist [manga].
Word Count: 6,260
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Havoc doesn't know who he feels sorrier for: Tucker, or himself.
Warnings: Slash, masturbation, handjob, angst, a smidge of non-con for those who might be sensitive to ( Read more... )

fanfiction, character: shou tucker, fma_fuh_q, character: jean havoc, fma

Comments 12

a_big_apple December 1 2010, 04:54:30 UTC

That was fucking creepy, but COMPLETELY AMAZING. I love it when people find a way to make completely bizarre pairings happen for this comm, and this is one of the most bizarre I can imagine. Fantastic.

anat_astarte December 1 2010, 05:11:55 UTC

Yeah, agreed,....just...wow!
Great fic!

colonel_bastard December 1 2010, 05:28:09 UTC

Aww, thanks so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :D

colonel_bastard December 1 2010, 05:27:05 UTC

Yeah, this pairing was too bizarre to resist, haha. My quest to pair Tucker with every FMA character continues...

I'm really glad you enjoyed it. "Fucking creepy" was pretty much my goal, so it's great to hear you say that! Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I know this one's a pretty long fic, so I really appreciate that you took the time. ^_^

havocmangawip December 1 2010, 16:03:58 UTC

This was so disquieting and tight. It was physically uncomfortable to read it.

Job WELL done. Absolutely amazing mind fuck.

You examined the bitter and angry places that Havoc hates in himself and you did it beautifully.

colonel_bastard December 1 2010, 18:10:58 UTC

Ahhhhh your icon is super-appropriate. *_____*

And your comments are so generous. Thank you so, so much! I was really nervous about posting this fic--- it's pretty extreme, both in pairing and content--- and I'm just so thrilled to see it well-received. I'm really glad to hear you comment on Havoc's character work--- Tucker tends to steal the show (in my hands, anyway), but I really did want this to be Jean's story.

"Mind fuck" = SUCCESS. ^_^

Thanks for reading and commenting!

raja815 December 2 2010, 07:08:54 UTC

I'm really pleased that you stuck to your guns and finished this piece; I was really excited when you floated the idea by me, and I think it turned out quite well. I think the exposition was very believable and really fit into the creepy world of the Amestrian military, with all its underhand, off-the-books programs of evil. :D ( ... )

colonel_bastard December 3 2010, 02:55:36 UTC

You know me, I'm a big fan of all underhandedness in the Amestrian military, especially when it involves my poor Tucker. Which it often does. XD ( ... )

eve_n_furter December 4 2010, 22:41:17 UTC

I can sign my name to the above, and would like to add that I like the overall atmosphere of this. The night scenes, Havoc's dreams, the physical impressions and Tucker's "searchlight eyes" gives it an almost dreamlike or "sleepwalking" feel. I enjoyed that most of all.

colonel_bastard December 5 2010, 05:47:21 UTC

Haha, thanks for reading and commenting on this one, I know it's not the most appetizing of pairings. XD I'm tickled to see you comment on Tucker's "searchlight eyes," since it was (vainly) one of my favorite details in the fic. Thanks also for the description of a "sleepwalking" feel--- the word in my head while I was writing was "nightmare," so it's great to hear that the piece has that subconscious vibe.

Again, thanks for reading! You're a braver one than most. <3

rberryberet January 2 2011, 21:56:58 UTC

I really liked this! I was reading the comments underneath, and I suppose there could have been more Roy, but I liked that it was just the two of them alone in the room. My favorite line: "Just two sets of tired blue eyes, one tied to a chair and the other tied to a bed, their world reduced to a hospital room and the smell of antiseptic." Gaah -- it captures their feelings of isolation so well, it's so beautifully written! I loved how you built up to the sex scene -- Tucker's last night, both of them being dogs of the military.. I always find your work so realistic - You can totally sympathize with Tucker and its just like: "Aaww.. poor guy.. let him have his wank!" Oh! oh! But then my favorite part: When Jean remembers how evil Tucker is and regrets helping him. I am such a sadist... His punishment suited me juuust fine ;). And the last paragraph/last line. That was really haunting. And reminiscent of chimera/Nina... I loved this!

colonel_bastard January 4 2011, 21:58:52 UTC

Ahahaha, I thought you'd like this one!! Thanks so much for going through and pointing out your favorite parts--- I love it when people do that. And I'm SO GLAD to hear that I got you to sympathize with Tucker. He's so demonized by the fandom, and I just don't think he deserves it.

"Haunting!" Fantastic, that's great to hear. Thanks so much for reading and commenting! :D