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Katekyou Hitman Reborn! » Tesoro mio

Oct 13, 2011 12:36

Title Tesoro mio (Eng. My treasured one/My darling)
Theme October 13: Even though the whole world is kidnapped by loneliness @ 31_days
Character/Pairing Hayato Gokudera/Haru Miura, Tsunayoshi Sawada and Takeshi Yamamoto
Rating PG or K+
Warning Spoilers for my other drabbles.
Wordcount 850

( 'He treasures you.' )

reborn!:tsuna, !31_days, reborn!:gokudera, reborn!:haru, reborn!:yamamoto, reborn!

Comments 4

gekkoo_te October 13 2011, 19:05:49 UTC

yes, the rest is up to her :D
i like this one, though i'm not sure that i correctly understand why gokudera left after haru actually agreed with his decision...

pekori October 13 2011, 20:13:55 UTC

It wasn't what Haru said that made him leave. It was the look she was giving him, which made him realise what he did.

After all of the progress Haru thought they were making, she is still number two on his list. Even after she confessed that she loves him, he didn't even try to talk to Haru about what she would want. That made her understand that even though Gokudera means the world to her, Tsuna is still (and maybe always) at the top of Gokudera's list of priorities.

I think the misunderstanding was my fault. It was hard for me to word things properly. I think writing it from Gokudera's POV instead of Haru's might have helped, too. :(

gekkoo_te October 14 2011, 01:56:43 UTC

Blame my lame english :/ in comparison to the other fiction i've read, yours was one of the hardest to read for me. Rich vocabulary, turns of speech etc often made me confused, so I had to reread some paragraphs again and again. It's a good thing, actually:) this way the text is more interesting, thnx again for it.

conditionally October 24 2011, 14:19:53 UTC

i've read every single one of your drabbles for october 2011 but i'm commenting on the last one first LOL i wanted to go through all of them ♥ they're really lovely - i like your take on this pairing. it's quieter, more subtle, than what fandom normally presents. (this is possibly due to the underlying sadness but you know)

She gives him a weak nod, then turns her attention back to the still-swinging door of the kitchen. Her heart calls quietly after Gokudera, resonating in their shared but separate loneliness.

this bit was especially heartbreaking. oh haru :( the 'shared but separate loneliness' is accurate. it makes me sad. gokudera, you butt.