Beatty, 1988 (part 9 of 9 + notes)

[kalliel]

Parts: 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 + a/n | Full Story (.PDF) | Artwork by starry_ice

fear (v)."November 2, 1983. You know the house. Was that you?" John can't say more than that. There's a reason it doesn't get talked about

Comments

[true_brit]

Take away the compelling ebb and flow of your narrative and the intriguing plot that meshes so beautifully with canon. Set aside your brilliant characterizations, and forget the genre (love me some Wee!chesters fic)... I'd still have been drawn into this story on the strength of your writing talent alone.

Your wordcraft just dazzles me. Thank you for an amazing ride.

[kalliel]

Sorry this is so belated. This story and I needed some, uh, time off. I hope you didn't feel as though your comment went unappreciated, because that is certainly not the case!

This is truly high praise. I don't know that I deserve it, but it means the world to me. Thank you so much for reading; I'm glad you enjoyed this. :)

[blackcat333_99]

Wow. This was just... it leaves me speechless. I had to pause several times while reading to absorb it and process -- the flashbacks and how much they hurt and how true they are to kids and how they think and react and have their own limited perspective but it doesn't make them wrong... all of it. Just wow. And the juxtaposition of how Sam and Dean's memories of their flashbacks still ripple into effect in this "today" of theirs, nobody can hurt them quite as bad as each other, and sometimes they mean it and sometimes they don't understand the hurt, but there's always love tying them together, their safety net of each other, no matter the push-pull of all the rest

[kalliel]

Sorry this is so belated. This story and I needed some, uh, time off. I hope you didn't feel as though your comment went unappreciated, because that is certainly not the case!

Your review is so beautiful; I don't even know what to say, except that I'm thrilled it worked for you. I wasn't sure how much of what I wanted to evoke would come through. Thank you so, so much for your thoughtful commentary, and for reading in general. It means a lot to me. <3

[felisblanco]

This was absolutely amazing. Just so so beautiful. Poetic in all its horror and terror. I had shivers running up my spine and I don't think I even breathed during the last two chapters.

God, your Dean! I just want to cry for him. And hug innocent little Sam and yes, despite him thinking he's doing what he needs to do I just really want to kick John because no, you're never ready but that's no excuse for putting a nine year old child through all that horror. Guess that's why I have such a hard time reading stories when they're small, I just get so damn angry.

Congratulations on a job well done. I don't usually read much gen but the art pulled me in and damn am I glad it did. It's just as sad and scary and gorgeous and fits the story perfectly.

[kalliel]

Sorry this is so belated. This story and I needed some, uh, time off. I hope you didn't feel as though your comment went unappreciated, because that is certainly not the case!

Weechester!fic seriously just kills me. Because it's just like. OH. WHAT. OH MY GOD. SRS. ACK. AKFJA:K. DDDD: Your comment made me really, extraordinarily happy. I'm so pleased Dean and Sam here made you feel for them--especially if you don't read much gen.

And right? starry_ice's artwork is phenomenal. It puts me to shame, it really does. So lovely.

Again, thank you so much for reading; it means a lot to me. :)

[katsheswims]

This made me want to cry so many times.

And I can't help but wonder why Sam would ever trust Ruby in the future if this was thier first meeting-and I can't imagine him ever forgetting it either. (And I had no idea the body she was using was 11-a kid-maybe I just missed that?)

I don't like John. And I can understand his motivations, but I cannot condone bringing Dean along on hunts as a 9 year old!

Great job.

[kalliel]

Sorry this is so belated. This story and I needed some, uh, time off. I hope you didn't feel as though your comment went unappreciated, because that is certainly not the case!

Aww, I'm sorry it was upsetting, but also glad it stirred something in you. re: Sam, I'm not really sure why he'd trust her again, though in my mind he doesn't remember this in definite details. I imagine it would make him more interested in/receptive his psychic powers, or Ruby's interest in him, etc. than the rest of his family.

As for her body, upon re-reading I feel like it was misleading, too; I didn't mention it in her original scenes.

John is a complicated case; you can't really ever agree with him, but I'm not sure he had any choice to make things...suck less horribly. D;

Thank you so much for reading this; it means a lot to me. <3

[cho_malfoy]

Great story! I live in Nevada and I've been through Beatty, so that along with the impressionistic style of voice was an utter treat for me. (Only one note: Carson has a sheriff's department, not a PD.) Thanks for sharing!

[kalliel]

Sorry this is so belated. This story and I needed some, uh, time off. I hope you didn't feel as though your comment went unappreciated, because that is certainly not the case!

I'm glad you enjoyed this, even with the lol inaccuracies (I'm certain the sheriff/PD thing is far from the only misstep). I really appreciate that you took the time to read this, and that you enjoyed it.

Thank you so much for reading!