The Vegas RPS extravaganza. DB/AD, NC-17

[chlare]

Unrelated to any previous DB/AD RPS.
Disclaimer: This is fiction. I don't own these guys, and no harm is intended to them or the locations mentioned.

Comments

[thunder_nari]

Okay. That was fucking amazing. I can't even begin... Just amazing. I really need to go catch up on your other rps. *grin*

[chlare]

Thanks! I couldn't get them out of my head after I visited the strip, so the whole drive home I wrote a bunch of this in my head. Glad you liked. :)

[moonlit_violets]

*whimpers*

You do AD/DB so well!

That was hot and sweet and sweaty and raw and....

It was real, and it was going to hurt.

Brilliant!

[chlare]

Thank you!

You do AD/DB so well!

That's so sweet of you to say. :)

[lonelybrit]

GUH and ::meep::

Wow. Wonderful. Hot as anything, but also with all that angst and the way all of a sudden the fun evaporates at the end. It was real, and it was going to hurt. These guys really are in for it now.

Great writing, bravo!

[chlare]

Wow, thanks! I like how you describe it as evaporating. That's exactly it. There's the super fun side, and then there's reality sitting there waiting for them to notice. The pot has to boil over eventually.

[nevcolleil]

Wow... All the complex emotion in their complex situation... I love the style of this.

and he felt like he had a rash from all the stripper cards being shoved at him. [Fwip, fwip, fwip, thwack.]

And how hot it is, from the very beginning :D

Then he felt fingers dipping inside his waistband, and a hot hand flat against his back.

Now here's a thought I wouldn't mind seeing elaborated upon:

The last time they’d been here, it had been a masturbatory love fest from every possible angle, dirty stories told, each one an effort to make the other come without touching the other directly

:D

I love how you worked David's wrist tatoos in to this :) The bits with Alexis and David on the phone with their families is so touching. It gives the story a real edge.

And - oh, dear - the ending! You can feel the angst and frustration. Great job, Chlare! :)

[chlare]

Thank you! I hoping to drizzle in more of those little tidbits, but they weren't forthcoming. Glad they worked, though. :)

It was all about the hotness. The Strip just oozes with it in a cheap dirty way...so had to give it a little class.

here's a thought I wouldn't mind seeing elaborated upon

Oh, if I thought I could write that... Yeah, I wouldn't mind reading that either. ;)

Thank you, thank you, thank you. You know I adore your comments. :)

[chlare]

or rather, I was hoping... *shakes head*

[kayla926]

I love your RPS, especially when it's DB/AD. And I also love how you can make it so hot, yet throw the angst in there too.

I wanna go to Vegas now. :P

[chlare]

Thanks! The angst manages to sneak in somehow. It was going to be just a lovefest, but I guess I just couldn't do it. There had to be some emotional punch.

Has the story taught you nothing, young grasshopper? Only bad things happen in Vegas. ;P Or at least to some people. :p

[kayla926]

But there's also super hot sex, with hunky men in Vegas. I want some of that. :P

[chlare]

I'm so first in line for that. ;)