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Mar 28, 2007 18:46

Felt like doing a little piece on Jeddy  and it seems like I'll be doing a lot of those!! ^_^

Title: Lips
Genre: Dark/General
Setting: SilMil
Rating: PG13

Jadeite had not needed to scan the room for long before he had found her body, semi-hidden in the temple room of the palace by shredded ceremonial drapes and broken pillars. He approached, half weary ( Read more... )

character: jadeite, prompts, character: rei/mars, fandom: sailor moon, timeline: silver millennium

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lovelylytton February 16 2009, 13:55:49 UTC
This

She lay sprawled on the floor, graceless and almost hideous in her disfiguration, the opposite of what she had been in life. She was bruised and beaten, her source of vanity tied back roughly into a long, greasy black braid and snaking along the filthy floor. The blood had drained from her body, pooling around her like someone had spilt a bottle of crimson oil paint, discolouring her skin to a pallid off-white.

and this one
He looked at his finger, coated in her essence, the closest colour he could find to match, and traced it delicately along her chapped lips. Satisfied with his work, like a two year old would be of his crude and imperfect drawing, he got up and walked out of the room.

made me shudder. Absolutely amazing series, I have to tell you.
Also, the name Iseult is very pretty, where did you find it?

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charliechaplin2 February 16 2009, 19:58:04 UTC
Your reviews are so lovely! Thank you! I'm glad you like the series. Iseult comes from one of my favourite Arthurian legends: Tristan and Iseult ( ... )

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lovelylytton March 8 2009, 18:43:02 UTC
Argh, I feel so silly now. I do know about Tristan and Iseult, only Iseult is spelled Isolde in my native language so I didn't make the connection.
I did rec this series on my LJ, I hope this is okay?

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charliechaplin2 March 8 2009, 19:06:54 UTC
Haha, no worries, there's loads of different names for them anyway. What is your native language by the way?

And reccing my fics? OF COURSE! (although I'm now seriously blushing!! THANK YOU!) You've made my week (which is something since I've got a nasty exam week coming up!)

I hope you're feeling better! No more cycling in the rain from now on ^_^

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lovelylytton March 8 2009, 19:40:14 UTC
Nasty exam week sounds nasty, but if you study half as well as you write, you shouldn't have any problems. *gives you the thumbs up*

My native language is German, but I do love English. I also tried to learn French and Spanish, but boy, those are two very difficult languages...

The rec is up, I'm happy that it made you happy, these fics really deserve some spotlight.

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jenbunny March 8 2009, 19:52:44 UTC
That was amazingly written. Great work here, this series is seriously making me want to cry but I'm really enjoying reading them at the same time.

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charliechaplin2 March 8 2009, 20:27:16 UTC
Oh, I hope it doesn't make you cry, but I'm glad it evokes the unhappy emotions...sorry. ^_^;

By the way, that is the CUTEST avatar!!!! BUNNY! ^_^

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jenbunny March 8 2009, 20:35:23 UTC
^^ Thank you, I've had that for I don't know how long now and as I've said else where on one of the other things I commented for today you are a very talented writer. You pull off the emotions very nicely ... and this goes for all the other nice replies you've sent to my comments on the other stories as well ^_^

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charliechaplin2 March 8 2009, 20:44:54 UTC
Well thank you, that means a lot! ^_^

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mrcrybrilliance March 8 2009, 20:39:12 UTC
I love how you maintain their inner conflict (though I'm terrified of reading the Ami/Zoi one....).

For me the most touching part of this was Jadeite trying to untangle her hair and then "painting" her lips.

I'd love to see this turned into a full fic, with the story of how the girls "betrayed" the men by letting Endymion die. It was hinted at in Jupiter's story, but this definitely makes me curious. It's clear that the guys are killing themselves even as they cling to revenge and anger.

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charliechaplin2 March 8 2009, 20:44:23 UTC
Ah, the slippery slope to revenge... I figure it's one that will never make you happy, but the Shitennou had nothing else to cling to so, even knowing that it wouldn't help them, they tried anyway. I was hoping the internal feelings thing wouldn't end up being boring, so your comment makes me estatic! Thanks!

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mrcrybrilliance March 8 2009, 20:47:38 UTC
Good it should! This is fantastic writing.

As much as I'm terrified of this... I can't find the link to the A/Z fic.... help?

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tennadreams October 27 2009, 02:46:57 UTC
You've placed a sad smile on my lips though it isn't at all bad. I could see the scene play out as I was reading this and I find it so moving. I liked the part where Jadeite is resentful about not being the one to kill Mars and the last part where he wants to try and recapture her through untangling her hair and painting her lips with blood. The implications of that excite the shipper in me. ^_^ There's a feeling of hollowness and restlessness at the same time that I picture with stillness... sorry for the rambling with all the 'ness'es but anyway, great piece!

Thank you.

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