Comments | carmine_pink: [one-shot] Unbroken

carmine_pink

[one-shot] Unbroken

Sep 13, 2010 15:13

Title: Unbroken
Type: One-shot
Word count: 4,685
Rating: G
Pairing: Yamapi/Shige
Summary: The boy doesn’t entirely understand, but he feels as if he’s witnessing something special. Future fic. sanjihan deserves cookies for the super quick beta-ing last night. My first ShigePi one-shot, yay! ♥

( He's the only person in the room who is not getting the message )

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carmine_pink September 15 2010, 10:14:19 UTC

LOL. I asked my sister, who knows Japanese, whether the kanjis for 'Tomo' and 'Aki' from Shige & Pi's names can be combined and she said they can, hence the boy is born! I also googled the name and was surprised to find a doctor named Kato Tomoaki XD

The pirate entries were fun to make. I knew this story was going to end with a goodbye but I couldn't help adding that little positive note through the email ;) Thanks for the comment!

fancyann1974 September 19 2010, 13:47:57 UTC

so loving and touching
tomoaki was so adorable and loved his dad so much
hope yampi can find a way back to shige
thank you so much for sharing

carmine_pink September 20 2010, 06:17:21 UTC

I'm glad you liked this. Tomoaki and Daddy Shige were such a joy to write &hearts Thank you!

sanjihan September 25 2010, 04:38:13 UTC

You already know I love this, so I'll just start in, yeah? :D

Tomoaki sinks lower in his seat as he stares at his omurice. Three hundred pages? He can barely write three paragraphs.
Oh my god. Can this boy get any cuter?! <3

When they told him he could choose who he wanted to live with, he burst into tears without intending to and said he wanted to stay with both of them.
Gah. Still heart-wrenching. Man. I really just love how well you've done the child's perspective.

Hitomi’s house
I TOTALLY knew that was Koyama's baby. XD

Tomoaki looks up at him suspiciously, at the deep, liquid eyes that were unreadable but not entirely unkind.
Nrrrr…. First, Pi's languid smile and then liquid eyes. I… <3 <3 <3 But also, Tomoaki. XD You awesome little boy, lol.

Tomoaki sees his eyes flitting at Shige’s direction, which he does a lot.
So not subtle, Pi. And I love it. He's so vulnerable when it comes to him…

Yamapi seems to be a pretty nice guy, but although Tomoaki takes an immediate liking to him he thinks that beneath the cool ( ... )

carmine_pink September 25 2010, 10:14:00 UTC

A quote-filled comment. FOR ME. I heart you

( ... )

sabi_she September 25 2010, 16:22:09 UTC

I like this. A lot.

I just want you to know I’m not giving up.
I’ll find a way back to you, Shige.
I always will.

I can just imagine this scene like it's from a movie and it makes me all a-flutter and weepy. :D Yay ShigePi.

carmine_pink September 25 2010, 16:40:46 UTC

Yay! I'm happy you liked it. ShigePi is love &hearts

xyabux December 29 2010, 01:35:59 UTC

I love this! it was so cute and amazing ¨ ! I really really like you writing style and I love Tomoaki! Like fairy_illusions said "So when I read the pairing of ShigePi and then saw the name Tomoaki, I SERIOUSLY thought it was Shige and Pi's kid lol " that was what I thought too!

Will there second part or something?! ;3; It would be nice that i's POV version or something :D

Tomoaki remembers what his father told him once, about a friend who didn’t know what to write, and now he thinks he knows who that friend is. <- I just ;#;

And I love the end!! Gash perfect fiction! Love this!

xx Michi

carmine_pink December 29 2010, 07:28:15 UTC

Thanks so much for the compliment! This is one of the fics that I'm really proud of. And yes, there will be a sequel, although I'm unbelievably slow on writing it. >.< But I hope you'll read it too once it's finished which is God knows when, LOL. Thanks again!

xyabux December 29 2010, 14:20:45 UTC

REALLY!??!!?? *DANCE* Gash I love you! *hugs* I really really will read it! And I will wait and... read this many times again and again :D