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This is an interesting piece and while I don't see too many specific things I'd change in here, I would like to offer some suggestions. First, I'd omit the author's note. It's a bit of a hand-holding for your reader. One of the best things about some pieces of writing is the way readers can interpret them however they'd like. I think if you end the piece with in...and out..., it'd be much more of a impact for your reader
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This is an interesting piece and while I don't see too many specific things I'd change in here, I would like to offer some suggestions. First, I'd omit the author's note. It's a bit of a hand-holding for your reader. One of the best things about some pieces of writing is the way readers can interpret them however they'd like. I think if you end the piece with in...and out..., it'd be much more of a impact for your reader ( ... )
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TTFN, Tyger
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