The "Do you need help" line. I mean, the execution was boring. You should spice it up! Something like "Fear not, fair maiden" yadda yadda. The bad dialog is really key. But I'm sure you can practice that.
Hmm... no opening line, no weapon out, the stoic glare isn't bad but not good enough to scare off a threatening dragon or something. I'll give you fourty points.
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Is this a sort of test?
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What is it?
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Just a drill soldier, you can stand down now.
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I see you got all your limbs still intact. Why did you scream like if they were torn off you one by one then?
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