Title: Third Time's a Charm 1/1

[calie15]

TItle: Third Time's a Charm 1/1
Summary: He screwed it up the past two times, this time he had to fix his mistake before it was to late.
Rating: NC-17
Notes: Smut, haha. Thanks to Lucy for the editing.

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Comments

[chlarks_cupid]

that was PERFECTION....just so PERFECT!
You write them so well...i LOVE your Ollie...this NEEDS to happen on the show. :)

[slytherinpunk]

Lol--damn. That was hott. I feel like someone should call the fire department...

I did find two tiny errors: “It doesn’t matter anymore.” She whispered softly, feeling as if her throat was in her throat.

and one at the end: and when she whispered those three words to her his arms tightened around her and he whispered them back.

Pretty sure you meant whispered those three words to him, his arms tightened around her and he whispered them back.

I really enjoyed the concept of this. Ollie and Chloe had been friends with benefits, and Ollie screwed it up, wanting more. We don't get to see a lot of fics where he hurts Chloe like he did in here, but it was also great in that aspect because we got to see Oliver grow from his mistake and try to pick up the pieces. Awesome job as usual =)

[calie15]

Thanks! I took care of them. I wrote this way to late last night and I know their were a huge amount of mistakes and poor Lucy edited it like at five in the morning.

[lilacs_roses]

I almost skipped this because it didn't have anything about oliver/chloe in the tags on my Flist, however, I skimmed it and realized that, indeed, it *was* a story about our two favs so...

Other than needing some editing, this was really well done. Thanks for sharing :)

[kryptolori]

Bloody hell Calie that was so hot and intense, I was gripped! fantastic! god when I read it I remembered what JH said about what happens when a barrage of emotions start getting in the way, my god *fans self* Loved it!

[sarja]

Nicely done! The situation and emotions were portrayed really well. :) Ditto on the editing just to polish it up.