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burnphone

First fic - Revelation - Original

Apr 21, 2010 04:05

NOTE: This is the unbeta'd, original, version of this fic. There's no real reason to leave it up except to remind me where I started at.

My first fanfic. NCIS - which of course I do not own - based with some Tim/Tony shippage. Probably about a PG-13. I'm new to livejournal too, not sure how to handle links and stuff so you'll have to bear with me.

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murgy31 April 21 2010, 14:12:54 UTC

I loved this! You are going to continue this right? It was awesome!

burnphone April 21 2010, 18:03:21 UTC

Thanks for reading! You said you had a McNozzo fic yourself, any chance of a link? I'd love to check it out.

And hopefully it shall soon be continued. I have a rather cliche idea about the boys being sent undercover at a gay bar and I'm not sure I can resist torturing Tony just a little.

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burnphone April 24 2010, 16:33:41 UTC

Yay, thank you! I'm glad you liked it! Hopefully the sequel (which is moutainously long) won't be a disappointment.

Ooh, I've read your Tony/Palmer fic too, that's a pairing that's growing on me. It'll never be Tony/Tim though :D

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catwalksalone April 26 2010, 11:21:01 UTC

Firstly, thank you! I'm delighted I could inspire you to write Tony/Tim. :D

Secondly, I think you've got a lot of potential here. You seem to have a really strong sense of who the characters are to you, and that's really important. I liked the sense of urgency and fear that came through really strongly. Good job.

There are some issues here and there with basic grammar/punctuation stuff, nothing unusual for people starting out. We all do it. I always suggest finding a beta to work with because some times after you've read your own fic through a million times it starts to lose all meaning and simple errors can slip past. I know it can be daunting asking for help when you're new, but beta requests have been put up before at kissmeprobie so you wouldn't be the first. I tend not to beta on a regular basis because of time issues, but if you'd like me to go through this fic for you to iron out the kinks, I'd be pleased to, especially given my role in its production. :D

Congratulations on your first fic! May it be the first of many.

burnphone May 31 2010, 18:02:26 UTC

And you're a nice person too, isn't that just typical! Thanks for reading this. I'm glad you're not outraged to have had a role in its production.

I agree with the need for a beta, I'm terrible at proofreading my own stuff - my brain knows what it's meant to say so I read that whether that's not written or not. I'm not really sure how this beta stuff works but think I will post a request to see if anyone will help out. If you do have a bit of spare time on your hands kink ironing help would be greatly appreciated!

catwalksalone May 31 2010, 21:45:13 UTC

I do my best! :D

Everyone has similar proof-reading issues, don't let them fool you! Once you've had a lot of practise you can generally spot most things, but a beta, or a least someone to give it a readthrough is invaluable, especially when you're starting out.

I'm happy to have a look at the fic for you. I'm copying and pasting into a Word document (Word for Mac). Can you read tracked changes or would you prefer I highlight changes in the document in a different colour? Can I e-mail the result to your livejournal.com address or is there a better one? (Questions, questions!)

I notice that you have more fic up, which yay, you! I didn't see any announcements on kissmeprobie, did I? I certainly haven't made you an author tag, so that suggests no. Unless you do post a notice to the comm (or any other NCIS fic comm), people who aren't on your friends list (those who have friended you/mutual friends) won't know it exists, which a) is a shame and b) sort of defeats the point of putting it out there if no one will stumble across it! You can scroll ( ... )

burnphone May 31 2010, 22:25:07 UTC

That would be great! My livejournal address would be fine. I don't have Word though (cheapskate student) so could you maybe underline changes, bold them or whatever? Thank you so much.

I've not posted on kissmeprobie, mainly because I'm so aware of how rough these are. I've posted a beta request though so hopefully I'll be a bit happier about them soon. And then posting shall commence!

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