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buiochas_le_dia

the end

Oct 20, 2006 11:46

EL FIN

author buiochas_le_dia
title: Underway 19/?
rating: R
pairing: JA/JP
feedback: comment, please.
disclaimer: i don't own the boys.
author's note:It killed me dead. Comment to your hearts content.

Chapter 1: On With Emotional Scars
Chapter 2: Wild Montana Skies
Chapter 3: On With Our Guitars
Chapter 4: The Breakdown of Mighty Superman ( Read more... )

underway, jp, ja

Comments 10

jellicle October 20 2006, 20:24:20 UTC

I'm depressed and this left me even more depressed.
But it was beautifully written.

legethien October 20 2006, 23:10:33 UTC

!
Noo... or. Yes! Or... This is very good and painful. I sometimes forget how great angst is, you're reminding me by writing this so well :D

readerj October 21 2006, 00:39:33 UTC

I can't deny this is beautifully written and is brutal in it's honesty.

Sometimes I felt like my head was turning inside out trying to wrap my head around all of it. But it's about life and since when does it ever follow the straight and narrow?

In the end though I can't help but feel a little broken by Jensen's decision to go back to Isabelle, as hard as it was for him it still felt like he made the easy choice.

It would be interesting to read about how it has changed their dynamic, once they're back at work and it's the two of them trying to find their way back to brothers and friends.

*cries*

buiochas_le_dia November 14 2006, 23:47:15 UTC

i think jensen definitely made the technically easier choice.
this chapter was so rushed, and i still feel sad whenever i re-read it. but technical difficulties be damned.
the way my original ending stodd it went in to jensen's thought process a little more. basically family was important to jensen, and as much as he wanted to, and i wanted him to, there was just no way in their realiy he'd be able to have that with jared.

anyways i'm writing a follow up of sorts right now. you'll have to let me know what you think.

carlita286 October 21 2006, 15:37:51 UTC

You are killing me with your story. There are sooo many emotiones mixed up, that I'm all confused by myself, don't really know what I should think now. All I know is that I love your story!

sumwh_rewayuphi October 21 2006, 23:22:32 UTC

This was awesome. It made me cry.

Great work.

-Deni.