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BIRTHDAY FIC: A Different War

May 02, 2011 18:41

Title: A Different War
Author: bugs
Rating: a lightweight M
Genre: Romance, Drama, A type of AU?
Word Count: 3,800
Summary: Two travelers meet on a rainy morning.

A/N: I apologize, akachankami, that your story is late (Italy time, still the second for me.) but my dyslexia struck again! I could have sworn your birthday was the third and vash26 's was the 2nd, and ( Read more... )

birthday fics, au, romance, drama

Comments 37

nixmom May 3 2011, 11:42:16 UTC

Lovely Bugs. The sense of place in this piece is incredible. i am sitting in my sunny living room, but swear that I felt an approaching storm.

I loved your description of the Van Gogh's, but then i am partial.

"Yeah. I slipped into the museum to dry off for a moment. And found this lovely thing."

"That's what European travel is like," she babbles, "Some surprise around every corner. It can be rather overwhelming, really."
I love here that Rose seems to think he is talking about the paintings. Silly girl..pay attention.

I like the subtle hints of past/future lives throughout leading to the "Laura" moment. Her name acting a bit like the cylon music. Triggering the realization of shared history/future.

I could gush..but work is calling. Thanks again...I like it when akachankami has a birthday. We all get presents!

bugsfic May 4 2011, 03:29:06 UTC

The sense of place in this piece is incredible.

Ah, now there's a term I haven't heard in a while. That's the only tough part about writing for a show set in a tin can; you don't get to use 'sense of place' much.

I loved your description of the Van Gogh's, but then i am partial.

I'll totally confess to Mary Sueing in up. I found the then new Van Gogh museum so moving. Sure, other museums have more 'important' paintings, but you could really feel his life in that collection, and sadly, his death.

Of course, when I got lost bicycling to some remote part with another museum, surrounded by wide open fields for miles, I really got that sense of place and doom. :-|

And if you haven't been to Arles, go. Another place to feel very close to Van Gogh.

Birthdays are the best part of LJ! :D

tcmcqueen May 3 2011, 15:36:18 UTC

I loved this story so much!!! thanks..keep writing please!! and it would be wonderfull they could meet in Spain (and yes Toledo is absolutely beatiful, my country is really wonderful ;))or they could meet in Basauri.....? hahahaha
Thanks again.

bugsfic May 4 2011, 03:42:31 UTC

I haven't been to Spain, sad to say, but it's next on my list! I've wanted to the El Camino de Santiago, which is near Basauri, right? LOL! But your con made me want to go there, for sure! I love off the beaten track sort of places!

lindy999 May 3 2011, 16:03:42 UTC

That was wonderful!!!

bugsfic May 4 2011, 03:43:03 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it! Something a bit different. :D

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bugsfic May 4 2011, 03:43:26 UTC

Great to hear!

vash26 May 3 2011, 20:12:44 UTC

Yay! Thank you, thank you, thank you, this is really making my day. When I saw May 2nd, 2011: Amsterdam: I went OMG A/R Amsterdam fic, it doesn't get any better than this!

I could have sworn your birthday was the third and vash26 's was the 2nd, and thus I could post one part for each of your birthdays.

Lols - I had the same thing, I could have sworn you had your b-day listed as the first, but it turned out to be the 31st. I was very sure!

May 2nd, 2011: Amsterdam:

This all happened here? Yesterday? Seriously? I missed them, she could have bought those condoms in my shop? Must have been during my lunch break ;)

Amsterdam, I think you've covered pretty much everything. You had the coffee shops, the museums, the pigeons, crappy hostels, gays, canals, bicyclists, clerks adressing everyone in English, yup that about summs it up.

She shrugs. It's not that she's jaded already, but she's recited her itinerary to every American she's met.

This is so true.

"Youth hostel?" His eyebrows rise. "Do they allow anyone over..." His ( ... )

bugsfic May 4 2011, 04:21:52 UTC

I can't believe it's been a year since your last birthday! (And I assume you feel the same way)

I went OMG A/R Amsterdam fic, it doesn't get any better than this!

Except the birthday girls were backward! But I couldn't flip the plot with Rome/Amsterdam, so, best laid plans and all that.

But I had to put the pharmacy in there! And your duty at the sex aides section. :D

I'm glad I gave a flavor of Amsterdam. Unfortunately, I've only been there once. I need to get back!

As someone who stays in hostels, you do get that question after you stop looking 21!

Oh, glad I got the pilot detail! I know they're being very hot and cold with American soldiers these days, pulling those who casually mention feeling a bit down (Hell, you're in a war!) while some act completely BSC and are ignored until they kill their wife and kids!

So, did it rain the whole time you were in Europe? ;)Well, the detail about traveling out of season was a Mary Sue too. I hate crowds. So I landed in Amsterdam in April one time and went to Rome in ( ... )

vash26 May 7 2011, 22:08:49 UTC

And your duty at the sex aides section. :D

And you did it so moderatley, well done :)

Unfortunately, I've only been there once. I need to get back! And if you do, I will take you on my boat through the canal and show you all the best places, of couse there will be two wining kids there too and you'l just have to ignore them ( ... )