Comments | bubbleforest: He Keeps Waiting (AJ/Brian, PG, for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/1sentence">1sentence</a></strong>)

bubbleforest

He Keeps Waiting (AJ/Brian, PG, for 1sentence)

Mar 23, 2006 23:56

For 1sentence. This was SO MUCH HARDER than I thought it was gonna be. General abuse of all grammar rules lie ahead. Many thanks to applecede and trumpeterofdoom for the encouragement. ♥

He Keeps Waiting
AJ/Brian | PG | Theme Set: Gamma | 50 sentences

( It begins like this. )

fic: !index, challenges: 1sentence, fic: aj/brian

Comments 26

epicflailer March 24 2006, 04:41:46 UTC

OMGSQUEE! dude, i'm jumping all around the page here, going up and then coming back to this comment box every time i find a sentence that i reallyreallyreally like so i can add it to the huge list at the bottom. i'm getting pretty damn dizzy.

you already know i worship you, but let me reiterate. I. WORSHIP. YOU. this is so perfect, from the characterization, to the little moments you picked, to the dialogue, to the interaction between the boys. i have so much respect and love.

box was awesome, so very, very perfect; i can see brian and aj in my head and that is exactly what they'd say and ohhhh. *quibbles* run. run broke me. brian's always the strong one, whatever they may say about kevin. and then in wings aj gets to be the comforter, andandand--god, how do you do this in ONE sentence?!

also, silk! *meep* i felt tingles, yo. and mask is just spot on, about misunderstandings and how there's always two sides to a story. and hee! sacred makes me grin because that's what all their fan!memorabilia should be about. and then gravity! ( ... )

bubbleforest March 25 2006, 02:05:51 UTC

Oh my God. Nat, seriously, how much do I LOVE YOU right now? This is like, the most awesome of all feedbacks! These are just SENTENCES, man, and you STILL manage to make your feedback long! Made my day, I tell ya.

You are so, so nice, and I am not worthy of all this praise! Hee, thank you! I just want to jump around and make squeaky noises of joy at you. I'm so, so glad you liked so many of them. Box and Silk, yo, I worked so HARD on those to make them sound right, and the fact that you felt tingles on Silk fills me with absolute glee. And, like, all your other awesome comments on the other sentences! Big huge THANK YOU! I don't care HOW dorky I sound right now, you fill me with dorky glee! *twirls around with you* ♥ ♥

epicflailer March 28 2006, 04:42:55 UTC

dorky! glee!

hee! *cuddles the fic* you are teh AWESOME, you know? and if i give long feedback it's only because the fic merits it and the writer merits it and BOY do you ever. you know that i'm absolutely in love with your writing!

alwayseven March 24 2006, 05:43:30 UTC

Oh wow.

I loved this. I love the aj/brian dynamic, yes, but I love too the really subtle, quiet writing. Also, I love some of the sentences you came up with for prompts, things that I never would have thought of but work perfectly.

For example: #20 Talent, cracked me up. LOVED it.
And #34 was perfect and unexpected.

I also especially loved #18, 22, 45, 48 and I should stop or I'll list them all.

Beautiful job.

bubbleforest March 24 2006, 10:05:35 UTC

Thank you! I had to think really long and hard on some of those prompts, that's for sure. But it's definitely a fun challenge.

Hee! I have a soft spot for #20 as well. :P But again, thank you. This means a lot coming from someone I've been fangirling like mad lately. ;)

applecede March 24 2006, 10:07:56 UTC

It's wonderful, just as I expected. So sweet and wonderfully written - and in so little words, too, which is what is really impressive. Their dynamic really comes through and reminds everyone why ARok is a favorite ship :)

(P.S. I'm online! Where are you?)

bubbleforest March 24 2006, 10:12:30 UTC

You are the sweetest, Lei. ♥ It's always the best feeling to get feedback from you.

(I have to leave in an hour and I still need to shower and stuff! I'm just running around trying to reply to everyone inbetween getting ready. Sorry! :/)

_titch March 24 2006, 15:42:13 UTC

Those were awesome Mette. :) You really know how to capture the wonderful essence that is Brian and AJ.

bubbleforest March 25 2006, 01:58:18 UTC

Thanks, hon. :) I'm glad the characterizations work and all.

mysoulunfolding March 24 2006, 16:04:24 UTC

Oh. My. God. Just... OMG... Wow...

"I wish I could tell you how-" AJ said breathlessly, eyes blazing, but Brian just nodded and placed a gentle kiss under AJ's jaw.

That made me cry. Good tears, though. I loved them all, but that one is my favorite.

bubbleforest March 25 2006, 01:59:22 UTC

Aww, THANK YOU! Well, I mean, it's never fun making people cry, but it's really nice to know that a simple sentence touched you that much. Thank you. ♥

mysoulunfolding March 25 2006, 02:23:13 UTC

No, really. Thank you.

*whispers* I've been re-reading these over and over. *sigh*
Can I just say that this:
"To hell with Jack Daniels," Brian hissed, pinning AJ's wrists above his head and murmuring the same words again into AJ's mouth. sends shivers down my spine?

♥
*is off to work on BTY now*

bubbleforest March 25 2006, 02:28:48 UTC

*blush* you are too nice. Thank you. This is so good for my greedy writer's soul, man.