Harry Potter (Remus/Tonks) FIC: By Any Other Name

[bratty_jedi]

Title: By Any Other Name
Rating: Not for little ones due to one frequently repeated curse word, but that isn't a problem around here.
Characters: Remun Lupin and N. Tonks with Harry Potter and Sirius Black making their off screen prescences strongly felt.
Setting: During Chapter 29 of Order of the Phoenix.
Format: Fic (~2,800 words)
Summary: "'

Comments

[kileaiya]

AWW! That was lovely! *is not very good at reviews*

[bratty_jedi]

Whatever you can say is appreciated. I'm glad to know you liked it. :)

[mrstater]

Such a great one-shot. I've always thought Remus must have gotten quite nostalgic after Harry's call, and you've gotten into his head so believably. The way he just blurts everything out is poignant because it's so raw and heartfelt and bittersweet.

Leaving the real issue unresolved really was a smart way to deal with it. Tonks' age and experience aside, there aren't solutions to thinks like this. But she has given him a bit of very helpful advice -- that simply being content -- really, settling< for/i> is what Remus means -- with what he's dealt really isn't the right thing to do at all.

And from a beta POV, the additions you made with Tonks in the beginning work really well. I can just see her coming in tired, getting a bite to eat, perking up, and consequently cheering Remus up even though there's not really an answer.

This is, quite simply, a nice slice of life. You should do more. :)

[bratty_jedi]

Thanks. I think part of my problem writing it was that I knew there was no way to just fix everything in one conversation but I wasn't sure how to leave the issues messy without the fic feeling like it was left hanging as well. Thanks for helping me find the happy medium that seems to have worked :)

And from a beta POV, the additions you made with Tonks in the beginning work really well.
Hehehe. I think you suggested one or two places to add more descriptions and I ended up putting in more like six or seven. I think it added some depth and reality that was lacking before and I'm glad it works really well for you :)

You should do more.
Like I'll ever stop? I just need more hours in the day or days in the week or something.

[gilpin25]

Really liked this; I think it was an excellent scene to pick to fill in "What happened next," and comes across as both plausible and well-written. (I always like to imagine Tonks was just out of the room when Harry popped in for his little chat, and Remus was studying bargain holidays for two on that parchment;)). I particularly liked the fact that Tonks didn't solve the problem with some smart answer, which would have seemed a little unlikely, but diminished it for him as much by force of personality as what she actually said, especially him hiding the lingering bitterness at the end. Good characterisation of them both

[gilpin25]

what she actually said, especially him hiding

Erm, there's a missing 'and.' "...what she actually said, and especially him hiding..." Why is it I never notice these things till I press the damn button? ;)

[bratty_jedi]

Thanks for the lovely review! I'm glad you liked it and that leaving it messy seemed like the best way for it to go. I really wanted that, but wasn't sure I could leave the issues unresolved without feeling like I left the story hanging as well. I'm so relieved I apparently managed to walk the fine line between the two :)

I see what you're saying with the setup and I'll have to think about it. I kind of like the idea of reducing the setup and letting it unfold a little more throughout the story. The one problem is I do want to have the bit about Remus and Sirius taking a pleasant stroll down memory lane before they both went into their separate funks and I'm not sure how to fit that in later. Perhaps I could have Tonks ask about "Where's Sirius?" at some point and slide it into the dialogue that way. Hmmm... I shall ponder and perhaps get back to you. Thanks for the suggestion!

So glad I could provide the perfect lunch break reading!