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Saiyuki ficlet series

Feb 27, 2006 00:34

Author: kazaera
Rating: Call it PG
Genre: Introspective stuff. Rather angsty, I guess.
Pairing: Gen
Notes: Four fics, each exactly 250 words from each character's pov. A study in second person; how the journey changes the ikkou and how it doesn't.

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pg, saiyuki, fic, gen, kazaera

Comments 26

mikkeneko February 27 2006, 01:24:33 UTC

I like these too. I like how they represent four different aspects of adaptability... and self-containment. I think I almost feel sorriest for Gojyo here.

kazaera February 27 2006, 01:47:21 UTC

Gojyo's turned out best, I think (and definitely angstiest; Hakkai's is surprisingly cheerful for the subject matter, Sanzo's is just Sanzo being a RAR NONATTACHMENT retard and Goku's is actually *happy*).
Not sure what you mean about adaptability, other than them adapting to the journey... the whole idea was about how each of them is changed by the journey (which, frankly, can't really bring out the best in anyone) until it got out of hand.

I'm glad you like them! :)

ex_witness389 February 27 2006, 01:25:44 UTC

Oh, these are simply lovely. ♥ Gojyo's is by far my favorite, it's so spot on Gojyo. :)

kazaera February 27 2006, 01:48:39 UTC

Thank you!
I'm glad you like Gojyo's; I liked it mostly for the imagery but wasn't sure about the characterisation as I don't write Gojyo that often. It's good to hear you think I got him. :)

marith February 27 2006, 01:25:52 UTC

I like them, too. Thank you!

kazaera February 27 2006, 01:49:56 UTC

Thank you for commenting! I'm glad you like them.

notfromvenus February 27 2006, 01:30:03 UTC

That's really good! :)

kazaera February 27 2006, 01:51:49 UTC

It's good to hear that! :) Thanks for the comment.

wordsofastory February 27 2006, 01:30:40 UTC

Oh, wow. These are really excellent; I love how each works individually, but they also go together so well. You've got some really amazing character insights here, but I think I like Goku's best: you really managed to capture how he can see things everyone else misses.

kazaera February 27 2006, 01:59:57 UTC

*blushes* Thank you! They are supposed to work as stand-alones but also part of a cycle so I'm happy you think that works out.

I'm also glad you think Goku's works because that was the one that gave me the most trouble (mostly because I'm not sure on my Goku-voice at all); I wanted to show exactly what you said (yay!) but wasn't sure if he was being too dense or too wise or both at the same time. But it seemed like a Goku-ish thing to say.

Thanks for commenting!

flemmings February 27 2006, 18:29:32 UTC

mostly because I'm not sure on my Goku-voice at all

Seems to me that you got it down pat. Way to go. But it's odd how Gokuu, the most straightforward of the four, is the hardest voice to capture convincingly. Possibly because TTBOMR we never hear him soliloquizing in the manga. Hey, talk is for *talk*- to other people, right? No point in talking to /yourself/.

kazaera February 27 2006, 22:05:36 UTC

Good to hear it seems to have worked.

But it's odd how Gokuu, the most straightforward of the four, is the hardest voice to capture convincingly.

Exactly! That and I'm better at insane or at least disturbed people. Issues are much easier to write than the lack of them, and Goku is one of the most issue-less people there are (at least in Saiyuki).
Plus, yes - Goku monologues seem OOC because Goku isn't really the type to talk to himself.

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