Comments | bluerising: The Perfect Dark

bluerising

The Perfect Dark

Mar 01, 2010 23:19

The amount of devastation was simply incredible.

Kakashi stood before the village gates. His mouth was dry, and eyes and body stiff from traveling two days straight without rest. A cold shock gripped his chest, making all other forms of thought impossible. He felt like a survivor from a shipwreck, freshly washed on to shore, and desperately ( Read more... )

shakes!fic, challenge, kakasaku

Comments 23

moderndayportia March 2 2010, 12:50:47 UTC

Hey, send me a word file of this and a copy of the link.

bluerising March 2 2010, 13:23:51 UTC

All right. I sent you an email!

omizu March 2 2010, 21:21:04 UTC

This is so sweet and very descriptive. I like it.

bluerising March 3 2010, 18:26:53 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed. ;)

lulu_42 March 2 2010, 23:43:56 UTC

OMG! *flails*

I love your description, it feels so natural and beautiful and... and....*flails more*

I think what captures The Tempest the most, is the acceptance that all things must come to an end as a new stage beings. I love the atmosphere.

bluerising March 3 2010, 18:32:18 UTC

Ah maw gawd. It is all about new beginnings, isn't it? By the end of reading the actual play I'm pretty sure my eyes were just a little bit watery...

denilmo March 3 2010, 18:10:02 UTC

It was so beautiful and descriptive ^_^
I just absolutely loved it!!

bluerising March 3 2010, 18:34:14 UTC

Thank you. <3

tiredbuthyper March 5 2010, 14:02:15 UTC

Aww, this was sooo sweet! I like how it captured The Tempest's feeling of acceptance.

Your style of narrative in this is lovely and descriptive. I especially loved the section from Tsunade's point of view; it really FELT like an older person. Also, the little touch of Naruto's reaction was insightful.

One question I have is whether Sandaime was married in your story. We don't know if he is in canon, though we do know he has at least 2 kids, so I was curious how that fits in.

Anyway, it was very sweet and I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks for sharing.

bluerising March 5 2010, 19:46:43 UTC

Oooooh! I didn't even consider that, but thinking back now... Asuma is the son of the Third Hokage, and Tsunade is the grand-daughter of the Second Hokage. Therefore they DID have families. Hmm. *rubs chin*

Oh boy. I guess for the sake of this story we'll have to gloss things over and say they all dealt with secret rendezvous and hidden lovers. Those sneaky, sneaky ninjas. ;D

tiredbuthyper March 8 2010, 22:02:15 UTC

Oops, forgot to reply to this!

They had kids, but marriage is up in the air. They can be sneaky sneaky ninjas if you want. :)