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[bjorklovesme]

So, I'm taking a play-writing course this year and this will be my considered my Final project. I know it's long but if any of you have a moment and would read it, giving me some creative feedback, it would be extremely welcomed. This is only one half of it, all written in one Act. Thanks again in advance

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[salomes_pimp]

I like where this is going. It's really good

[bjorklovesme]

Ah, thank you, Andrew! I can't thank you enough! That's EXACTLY the kinda feedback I needed! I'll definitely switch-a-roo a lot of the dialogue in the final drafts. And you're right... this play is only going to be in one act, so I really do need to flesh out the characters more. Especially Laura and Eric, seeing as they had an entire scene to themselves and I really didn't give them many quirks.

If you were here right now, I'd give you a hug. Or a sloppy blowjob. Or a cake of some sort.

[salomes_pimp]

Oh, wow. I didn't even notice until I read your response and wondered "Who's Eric?" that he starts out as Eric at the beginning and when they arrive at the house he's Benjamin. Heh.

Hugs, sloppy hummers, and cake are always appreciated. =)