A life once ordinary, chapter three

[bimupp]

Title: A life once ordinary

Chapter: Three

Author: bimupp

Pairing: Hermione/Luna

Rating: PG, just to be on the safe side

Disclaimer: I own nothing. they´re all J.K Rowling´s characters, I´m just playing with them.

Summary: Hermione has a rude awakening. Literally.

A/N: Remeber that reviews are love and give my sometimes sleeping muse a kick in the butt!

Comments

[tokyo_drift]

this is so good. i love luna to bits.
mind letting me know when more is up?

mmm. lesbians <333

[bimupp]

Thank you so much! *blushes*
Yeah, you can´t go wrong with lesbians, can you?;)
I´ll friend you so you won´t miss anything, how´s that?

[tokyo_drift]

its total perfection. how i miss doing those things
i`m gonna friend you right back.
thank you!

[bimupp]

Why don´t you friend people more often then;)?
I´ve started on chapter four already but there´s no telling when it´ll be finished. You have lovely icons btw, take care!

[erikdesoir]

I am going to be honest with you. Going into this fic, I was not expecting much. Much to my delight I was wrong! :) Luna is very touching. I really felt for her. :( I also am especially fond of the ending - it sounds open ended, yet even if you decided not to continue it has enough to let it end soundly where it does. I lovelovelove endings like that!

[bimupp]

Thank you for those lovely words, and for the honesty. That makes the review even more flattering;)

[crimsonwhisper]

I love this little bits of Luna. Scattered even in Hermione. This is really great, I can't wait for more.

[bimupp]

That sounds very poetic, did I really write that?;) Thank you so much!

[bimupp]

If you´re still interested, chapter four is up now;)

[cellardoor10]

I really like this story. Wouldn't want to miss the rest of it. Similar to erikdesoir, I didn't expect too much when I first saw that it was starting at a reunion, but I really like the intricate details of each character. Especially Luna - her character was left somewhat open to interpretation in the books, and I think you've done a lovely job with her.

[bimupp]

Thanks a bundle for those very kind words,I´m blushing here;)I thought so about Luna too, that´s actually what got me started on this:D
I´ll friend you too then, take care!

[bimupp]

Chapter four is up now, (hint, hint;)

[bimupp]

Just in case you´ve missed it, chapter four is up now;)

[tree00faery]

Nice story, so far. A couple of mistakes with the dialog (mostly previous chapters, I think) but other than that it's great. I love your icons, by the way. ^_^

[bimupp]

Thank you! Are you referring to my use of - instead of " in the dialogs or something else?

That´s a cultural clash, we normally use - in Swedish so I started out with that, but I´ve learned that Brits normally use " I just haven´t gone round to fix that in the previous chapters yet.

If it was something other than that you were thinking about please let me know.I welcome all kinds of feedback since English is not my mother tongue and I want to improve.And this being British English specifically is very important to me.

[tree00faery]

Nope, I wasn't refering to the quotation marks (or the lack there of). I don't have access to my normal computer right now, so I can't give you the exact lines, but I noticed that several times something like this occured:

"Where did I leave my sweater Ginny asked Luna. I can't find it."

I don't know whether this is how you would write in it Swedish, but in English it should be

"Where did I leave my sweater?" Ginny asked Luna. "I can't find it."

Only the dialog itself should be in quotation marks.
^_^ Hope this helped! By the way, if you ever need a beta, I'm free!

[bimupp]

Oh. Well, us Swedes would put a question mark in that sentence too, so that lack was sloppy of me *blushes*

Not I question your superior knowledge of the English language in any way but is three sentences out of that really necessary, or can this do:

"Where did I leave my sweater?," Ginny asked Luna. "I can´t find it."

Any road, as they say in Yorkshire, thank you very much for helping me!:D

Only the dialogue,(dialog is American English according to http://lexin.nada.kth.se/sve-eng.html;)itself should be in quotation mark- got it:D

That´s kind of you but I have an excellent one already, ever since the last chapter. She´s editing my one-shot "24/7" at the moment so the betaed version of that will be up soon if you´re interested. Might get back to you if she needs or vic or if she should decide to abandon me, and if you´re an a skilful brit-picker, though, thanks!

Take care!