A life once ordinary, chapter three

[bimupp]

Title: A life once ordinary

Chapter: Three

Author: bimupp

Pairing: Hermione/Luna

Rating: PG, just to be on the safe side

Disclaimer: I own nothing. they´re all J.K Rowling´s characters, I´m just playing with them.

Summary: Hermione has a rude awakening. Literally.

A/N: Remeber that reviews are love and give my sometimes sleeping muse a kick in the butt!

Comments

[tree00faery]

Nice story, so far. A couple of mistakes with the dialog (mostly previous chapters, I think) but other than that it's great. I love your icons, by the way. ^_^

[bimupp]

Thank you! Are you referring to my use of - instead of " in the dialogs or something else?

That´s a cultural clash, we normally use - in Swedish so I started out with that, but I´ve learned that Brits normally use " I just haven´t gone round to fix that in the previous chapters yet.

If it was something other than that you were thinking about please let me know.I welcome all kinds of feedback since English is not my mother tongue and I want to improve.And this being British English specifically is very important to me.

[tree00faery]

Nope, I wasn't refering to the quotation marks (or the lack there of). I don't have access to my normal computer right now, so I can't give you the exact lines, but I noticed that several times something like this occured:

"Where did I leave my sweater Ginny asked Luna. I can't find it."

I don't know whether this is how you would write in it Swedish, but in English it should be

"Where did I leave my sweater?" Ginny asked Luna. "I can't find it."

Only the dialog itself should be in quotation marks.
^_^ Hope this helped! By the way, if you ever need a beta, I'm free!

[bimupp]

Oh. Well, us Swedes would put a question mark in that sentence too, so that lack was sloppy of me *blushes*

Not I question your superior knowledge of the English language in any way but is three sentences out of that really necessary, or can this do:

"Where did I leave my sweater?," Ginny asked Luna. "I can´t find it."

Any road, as they say in Yorkshire, thank you very much for helping me!:D

Only the dialogue,(dialog is American English according to http://lexin.nada.kth.se/sve-eng.html;)itself should be in quotation mark- got it:D

That´s kind of you but I have an excellent one already, ever since the last chapter. She´s editing my one-shot "24/7" at the moment so the betaed version of that will be up soon if you´re interested. Might get back to you if she needs or vic or if she should decide to abandon me, and if you´re an a skilful brit-picker, though, thanks!

Take care!

[tree00faery]

I think either way is fine.

Ah, you caught me being American. ^_^ I usually use "dialogue" actually, but my spell-checker keeps correcting it to "dialog". (It's set to American English)

Ok, cool. I'm not a terrific brit-picker (as I'm not exactly a Brit), but I have read a lot of brit-picking guides!

Can't wait to read that one-shot! Will you post it in a community, or just in your journal? If it's just in your journal, do you mind if I friend you?

[bimupp]

Yeah, you´re busted;) I know, my spell-checker too, terribly annoying isn´t it?

Actually, I´ve posted the one-shot (24/7) already, before my beta came along. Just enter my memories section, click on "Hermione Granger/Daphne Greengrass or "fanfiction" and you´ll get to it:D
I will however change that version to the beta-ed version when it arrives. But if you can´t wait-why not go ahead? I haven´t got any feedback for that one yet, (maybe the slight, but non-graphic bdsm theme scare people off) and would off course love some (me?hinting?I´d never!;)

And I´m working on ANOTHER (my muse is back with a vengeance-hooray!) one-shot, my very first attempt at writing smut. That one doesn´t feature Hermione, but hopefully you´ll like it anyway;)

I always pimp my stories where ever I see fit (hp_girlslash for example) but friends are always welcome so just go ahead, I´ll friend you too:D