This... this is just amazing..! *hugs you senseless* I have to say, this is now probably my favourite fic ever. Because it's the first slashfic that has actually made me cry. The ending is just so sad, but also heartbreakingly sweet. I love how you describe Xabi's feelings so intimately (not sure if that's a good word here, but hopefully you know what I mean).
I must say I was a bit shocked at how everything turned out for them, I thought they were going to be all happy and in love. But I actually like this better. Because now you're left to fill in the spaces of what happens when Luis comes over. :)
But Luis' hand finds his chin and turns his head, forcing him to look into Luis' eyes. Luis doesn't accuse, not even judge. He just understands, he makes him feel that maybe it was not all that bad.This was where I started crying like mad. I love how, despite Xabi being all nervous and anxious, Luis just keeps calm and understanding. *wipes tears from eyes
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Thank you! I am very glad you like it. I know very well what you mean. I thought that Xabi might just be confused afterwards, seen that sleeping with the same sex is not seen as the norm, especially in such an environment dominated by men, like football. So, yes.
I thought it was time for a bit of other ending, and I hoped that people would like it.
Aww. *pets you* It's only a fic, nothing to cry over. (Ha! Says the person who is most emotional about this piece!)
I think it's a rare thing to see fics with this much emotion put into them, I know mine certainly don't have it. I hope you plan on continuing to write for a loooong time to come! Oh, you write yourself? Didn't know. Though, I might have read a Barcelona fic once. Usually my fics contain less emotion too. This one was a kind of experiment, and yes, I'd love to continue writing, if time will let me to! ^_^
Hehe, well, I'm super sensitive. I can't even read HAPPY fics without being all teary eyed. >__>
Oh, you write yourself? Didn't know. Though, I might have read a Barcelona fic once.
I wrote a Barcelona fic called Frozen. I read through it a few days ago and I still kinda like it. Which is rare. Usually when I read through my old fics I go all embarrassed cuz they're so bad. xD
Oh, I remember reading that one at the community. It was the one in the car, right?
When I read through my old fics I still love them, but yet I think about how I would do it differently now. That's a good thing, actually. Because analysing your own weaknesses is very important for improving.
that was the most hottest most sweetest thing i have ever read. everything couldnt have been written any better. loved loved loved the conflict within Xabi. and Luis. OMG. the strip tease, damn! i wish i was Xabi! and on top of that, Luis was so sweet and caring. just loved it. everything was perfect descriptive, from the Luis' house to Xabi's nervousness and regret. and i loved how Luis is still caring and sweet eventhough Xabi walks out. the throwing up was a nice added touch. makes it more believeble. omg, theres still so much that i loved about it! but i couldnt have gone to bed without reading this one eventhough i'll wake up with bags underneath my eyes. it was very much worth it.
one last thing(i promise) It will, won't it? oh please please please continue?!!!!
I was very unsure about the ending, because I thought people might have preferred a happy ending, you know. But the more I think about it, the more this ending makes sense.
Heeee! The striptease. I wouldn't mind Luis stripping for me and touching himself either. *dreams*
I'm very glad that the emotions came across how I had them in mind. *cheers*
I'm glad you read it before going to bed and took your time to leave a feedback. Thank you so so much! *squishes* Have sweet dreams now, love!
oh please please please continue?!!!! Hm, I might eventually. We'll see if more people are interested in that! :D
Luis letting Xabi be on top...guh. that was just perfect. when i've read fics before, usually the inexperienced one is the bottom, but this just worked so well!
as for a sequel, i wont press you for it, because this one took a long time, but still, its sooo good.
Actually, I've thought a lot about this and how it should be. But I think that anal sex is very unpleasant if the bottoming person is not relaxed and comfortable with it. And this just didn't work for Xabi. The more I think about it, the better this solution seems.
I'll be giving my best to write a sequel as soon as possible. :D
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This... this is just amazing..! *hugs you senseless* I have to say, this is now probably my favourite fic ever. Because it's the first slashfic that has actually made me cry. The ending is just so sad, but also heartbreakingly sweet. I love how you describe Xabi's feelings so intimately (not sure if that's a good word here, but hopefully you know what I mean).
I must say I was a bit shocked at how everything turned out for them, I thought they were going to be all happy and in love. But I actually like this better. Because now you're left to fill in the spaces of what happens when Luis comes over. :)
But Luis' hand finds his chin and turns his head, forcing him to look into Luis' eyes. Luis doesn't accuse, not even judge. He just understands, he makes him feel that maybe it was not all that bad.This was where I started crying like mad. I love how, despite Xabi being all nervous and anxious, Luis just keeps calm and understanding. *wipes tears from eyes ( ... )
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Thank you! I am very glad you like it. I know very well what you mean. I thought that Xabi might just be confused afterwards, seen that sleeping with the same sex is not seen as the norm, especially in such an environment dominated by men, like football. So, yes.
I thought it was time for a bit of other ending, and I hoped that people would like it.
Aww. *pets you* It's only a fic, nothing to cry over. (Ha! Says the person who is most emotional about this piece!)
I think it's a rare thing to see fics with this much emotion put into them, I know mine certainly don't have it. I hope you plan on continuing to write for a loooong time to come!
Oh, you write yourself? Didn't know. Though, I might have read a Barcelona fic once. Usually my fics contain less emotion too. This one was a kind of experiment, and yes, I'd love to continue writing, if time will let me to! ^_^
*pets you again* Have fun at school!
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Hehe, well, I'm super sensitive. I can't even read HAPPY fics without being all teary eyed. >__>
Oh, you write yourself? Didn't know. Though, I might have read a Barcelona fic once.
I wrote a Barcelona fic called Frozen. I read through it a few days ago and I still kinda like it. Which is rare. Usually when I read through my old fics I go all embarrassed cuz they're so bad. xD
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Oh, I remember reading that one at the community. It was the one in the car, right?
When I read through my old fics I still love them, but yet I think about how I would do it differently now. That's a good thing, actually. Because analysing your own weaknesses is very important for improving.
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first things first *fans self*
that was the most hottest most sweetest thing i have ever read.
everything couldnt have been written any better. loved loved loved the conflict within Xabi. and Luis. OMG. the strip tease, damn! i wish i was Xabi! and on top of that, Luis was so sweet and caring. just loved it. everything was perfect descriptive, from the Luis' house to Xabi's nervousness and regret.
and i loved how Luis is still caring and sweet eventhough Xabi walks out.
the throwing up was a nice added touch. makes it more believeble.
omg, theres still so much that i loved about it! but i couldnt have gone to bed without reading this one eventhough i'll wake up with bags underneath my eyes. it was very much worth it.
one last thing(i promise)
It will, won't it?
oh please please please continue?!!!!
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I was very unsure about the ending, because I thought people might have preferred a happy ending, you know. But the more I think about it, the more this ending makes sense.
Heeee! The striptease. I wouldn't mind Luis stripping for me and touching himself either. *dreams*
I'm very glad that the emotions came across how I had them in mind. *cheers*
I'm glad you read it before going to bed and took your time to leave a feedback. Thank you so so much! *squishes* Have sweet dreams now, love!
oh please please please continue?!!!!
Hm, I might eventually. We'll see if more people are interested in that! :D
Thank you again a lot.
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Luis letting Xabi be on top...guh. that was just perfect. when i've read fics before, usually the inexperienced one is the bottom, but this just worked so well!
as for a sequel, i wont press you for it, because this one took a long time, but still, its sooo good.
take a bow, sweetie! *squishes back*
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Actually, I've thought a lot about this and how it should be. But I think that anal sex is very unpleasant if the bottoming person is not relaxed and comfortable with it. And this just didn't work for Xabi. The more I think about it, the better this solution seems.
I'll be giving my best to write a sequel as soon as possible. :D
Yay!! *home now, work's over*
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*apologies*
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I'm glad you liked it. Tis ok, don't worry about the feedback. *is very willing to wait* And really, knowing that you read it is fine too.
Cheer up! There's nothing you can do about it now. You'll be more lucky next time.
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Actually, I think I should write another sequel, sooner or later. *nods*
Thank you again, love! *smooches*
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Tis ok, you don't have to re-read and comment more tomorrow. It's good to know that you read and liked it.
I love the way Arie writes Xabi and I would see him like that too, usually. But I think a first-time fic is a bit different. :D
*random hugs*
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