Fic: That Still Small Voice Chapter Two

[lady_oneiros]

Sorry for the wait on this chapter. It took forever, since it fought me every step of the way. I hope you enjoy!

Title: That Still Small Voice
Rating: M
Disclaimer: Transformers and all related characters therein do not belong to me. No copyright infringement is intended.

Summary: Sam has been pulled deeper into the conflict than anyone realized

Comments

[lady_oneiros]

Thank ya very much! ^_^ Glad you like it!

[lady_oneiros]

Thank you! *grin* This chapter put up one hell of a fight to be written, but I guess it turned out okay. Victory is mine! Round three, though, may be a different story. I'm glad you like the suspense in it--I've always thought that a chapter doesn't need a cliffhanger to make the reader want to keep going...it's a device that gets used perhaps a little too often, and it becomes tiring after a while. It's better to build up slowly, I think...*walking* that razor-edge of the cliff, not hanging from it, tends to be a little more thrilling, in my opinion. Hanging guarantees you'll fall, walking the edge, you're not sure if you'll suddenly trip or not.

I'm very happy that you like it!

[mercyforthesoul]

good so far

[lady_oneiros]

Thanks! ^_^ Now comes the test of being able to keep it up...

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[mister_moshi]

o, WOW. i've seriously been missing out. what drew me in was the fact that the title had the phrase "Fourth Wall" (i used to be in a craze for the concept of the Fourth Wall), and of course i had to read the 1st chapter before this one.... but it was so worth it.

this is amazingly dark, totally smeared black. the characterizations seem right-on, and even Mikaela is likable enough---and i love how your rendition of Sam is as goofy as in the movie. and all the while, your way of writing gives off this feeling of being threatened---like one has be on guard just reading it.

so cool~
i love <3

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[lady_oneiros]

Hooray! I have snagged another helpless victim!! *evil laugh* When it comes to titles, I personally love them, and an entire story will be written around a title I have in mind. That happened with this chapter. I wanted it to be "Breaking the Fourth Wall," so I ended up wrapping this part of the story around it. It makes writing a challenge, but very much a lot of fun.

I'm happy to hear that you think the characterizations fit. That's one of my biggest fears when writing fanfic, that I won't capture the essence that makes them so lovable in the movie/story/etc. I have to fight and sit and think about each thing they say, and if there is a doubt that they would say it, I have to chuck it and think of something else.

Thanks for reading! ^_^

[speechie42]

I love that you broke the fourth wall and I love how you did it. My boyfriend likes to pretend he's in front of a studio audience sometimes so this reminds me of him which makes me love it even more! ^^

[lady_oneiros]

Thank you! Breaking the fourth wall is extremely difficult in writing, I found with this chapter. In movies, comic strips, and plays, it can be done with really cool effects, but in writing it runs the danger of sounding cheesy or annoying. It gave me the chance to experience with a new trick, though. Glad you liked it! ^_^

[speechie42]

Well, you pulled it off you great writer you.