[TF: Ani Fic] Conduct Unbecoming

[beckyh2112]

Title: Conduct Unbecoming
Characters: Beta, Ultra Magnus
Word Count: 1026
Rating: PG
Summary: Ultra Magnus disciplines one of his Academy trainers for an affair with a student of hers.

Comments

[akastreakychan]

I have no words for how completely awesome Elita One is in this story. I loved her characterization and the fact that she was a teacher at the academy. Bravo!

[beckyh2112]

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I must admit, her being an Academy trainer was inspired by Tai's lovely Animated Kup design.

[beckyh2112]

It is pre-TF: Animated. ;-)

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[swarlock]

Covering all the angles I see. I could see this happening.

Slag! I feel so dirty thinking about it. (Wink!)

[beckyh2112]

Covering all the angles I see.

*headtilts* What do you mean?

[swarlock]

The whole "Mrs. Robinson" angle. Altrhough I'm thinking it's the other way around.

[newsy891]

Pretty much cross-posting the bulk of my comment from the 'spark - where I'm thrilled to see you've joined the challenge! =)

I'm intrigued by your characterization of Elita. She comes across as rough, tough and overconfident, and - amid true-life stories of teachers and clergy having relations with their students and young parishioners - as one who has abused her power. Yet there's still a shadow of the Optimus/Elita we all remember - your Elita wants to be sure nothing will happen to Optimus and is willing to accept a humiliating reassignment without appeal as long as she has that assurance, reminiscent of G1 Elita who was willing to give her own Spark to save her beloved.

[beckyh2112]

The challenge was what galvanized me to actually write this fic in the first place. *grins*

Cross-posting from the 'spark myself...

I'm glad the love affair aspect came across. I was a bit worried that using Ultra Magnus as the point-of-view character wouldn't get across that Optimus and Elita really are in love. (Because as much as I like writing Elita rough, tough, and overconfident, I couldn't stomach her if it wasn't a love affair.) Part of her overconfidence does come from believing she hasn't done anything wrong because they're in love.

[pax_athena]

Wow, a great story! I love it how you include so many different ideas, which all fit and expand the TF:Animater universe, in just a thousand words.

I enjoyed both the chacterization of Magnus, who is the very Magnus of this universe, as well as of Elita - she fits to this world, and yet as newsy891 said above there are still hints to the old rekationship between Optimus and Elita (the few things we know from the canon about them...). And you give an excellent, believable reason for the problems Optimus has later.

Somehow I really hope, that "end" does not mean that you will not return to this worls and those ideas. I think there is more that can be told :)

[beckyh2112]

Thank you very much! *blushes* I'm glad that you liked the story.

I do actually plan to write at least a couple more stories with Ani Elita. I'm just not sure when I'll get to writing them, as I've got another contest fic and some challenge fics to write for February.

On the other hand, that gives me more time to watch Ani and see how the characters behave there. Maybe glean some more knowledge of what it was like back on Cybertron. (I really love writing fics about Cybertron's culture and society, so it shows up a lot in my fics.)

[pax_athena]

There are always more stories to write than time :) Nevetheless, I really hope that you'll find the time to turn your plan to write more into reality!

Some insight into life on Cybertron itself in the Ani-universe would be great. Unfortunately the (very) short Episode summaries so far do not look like much of the story will be taking place on Cybertron, but at least they might introduce some further interesting characters *hopes* The less they tell us, the more is left for good ff writers to find out themselves ;)

[beckyh2112]

I do, too. I'll probably try to start one this month, maybe around Valentine's Day. (Shutup. It's appropriate to start tragic romances on V-Day. >_>)

So far, the most we've gotten of Cybertron has been from the pilot, and Ratchet's flashbacks to the Great War in "Thrill of the Hunt". Which, honestly, is slightly more than we ever got in G1 'toon. Seeing as G1 'toon Cybertron mostly seemed to have been a) scenery, except b) where Optimus Prime and the Constructicons had tragic backstories.