Comments | beckyh2112: [Seven Virtues Fic] Rainbow in the Dark

beckyh2112

[Seven Virtues Fic] Rainbow in the Dark

Feb 17, 2007 22:27

Finally got this one out of Limbo on my hard-drive.

Title: Rainbow in the Dark
Characters: Autobot females
Rating: PG-13
Summary: During the Great Shutdown, sometimes keeping to the high road means seeking out the depths.
Warnings: Death and famine.
Author's Notes: Assorted place references borrowed from Dun'verse.

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( Rainbow in the Dark )

table: 100_women, character: elita one, writing, series: g1 transformers, character: female autobots

Comments 18

Quick driveby comment, more later ravenclaw_devi February 18 2007, 08:39:50 UTC

I like this fic.

Small nitpick: There was nothing more Elita could do for her that would not effect all of her comrades. - should be "affect"

Re: Quick driveby comment, more later beckyh2112 February 18 2007, 16:18:19 UTC

Fixed!

And now for the "more" I've promised... ravenclaw_devi February 18 2007, 21:46:23 UTC

Like I said, it's a beautiful fic, if "beautiful" is the right word for a story that holds so chilling a theme.

You conveyed everything well - both what it meant for the female Autobots and Elita in particular to be in this kind of situation, having to make this kind of decisions that would amount to a "Sophie's Choice", and the hope and relief upon finding the Guardian with its fuel supply. One gets a feel for what it would have done to the female Autobots, how it changed them, yet how they still held on to being "not Decepticons" in their own way.

And Elita's brand of mercy (with Windchime)... ho boy! I think her and Steadfast would understand each other very well and have hatesmex.

What your writing about Elita makes it very understandable why her and Optimus didn't seem to much... find together again at the end of Search for Alpha Trion. I mean, in terms of her having been through things that Prime can't (or, likely, wouldn't want to) even imagine ( ... )

Re: And now for the "more" I've promised... beckyh2112 February 18 2007, 21:54:12 UTC

Mmm. *sinks her teeth into this review happily*

I'm not sure if I'll ever get to show it in this series of fics, but the way I reconcile the ending with "The Search for Alpha Trion" with the way I write Elita is fairly simple. Optimus Prime is the love of her life, and after four million years of seperation, they've finally been reunited just long enough to realize how much has changed. But they've barely had the time to discover that their relationship is different now, due to Elita changing, and they've certainly had no time to discover if they could adapt and change to a new relationship.

But that sort of thing needs time and energy devoted by both people involved, and I suspect that over the next twenty years, they didn't get the time they needed. And then Megatron attacked Autobot City.

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ravenology February 18 2007, 21:02:18 UTC

Heh, I even remember talking about those other Autobots' names now! Guess it was in limbo for a while. ;P

Nice to finally see this piece.

beckyh2112 February 18 2007, 21:54:41 UTC

But what do you think of the story?

dragoness_e February 21 2007, 00:13:24 UTC

This is a nice, grim story about the starving times on Cybertron and shows the bitter struggle that Elita and the femmes went through. Elita is a tough commander; and Chromia is scary as Elita's executioner.

darkfire_blade March 2 2007, 03:50:48 UTC

Bleak surroundings, lacking resources, and hunted by a ruthless cold-thinking killer of a Decepticon. Dark story, but you conveyed the way the femmes needed to act and be to survive on this dead Cybertron. Kindness indeed, but a very different sort than what I was expecting. Wow, very well done and shockingly beautiful. I don't think I'll view the femmes quite the same way again. I also need to go and see Search for Alpha Trion now.

beckyh2112 March 2 2007, 04:32:44 UTC

Thank you very much for this comment. *purrs and snuggles*

I love it when people get detailed, and I love changing the way people view characters. It's one of the most enjoyable parts of being a writer - illuminating a character in a different but still believable way.

wyntir_rose March 2 2007, 16:06:21 UTC

Bleak and dark but beautifully done.

You really protrayed how Elita should>/i> have been very well (as opposed to the '80s girly-girl of the cartoon). I could really see the female who lead the Autobots for so long.

I also liked how your characters treated the deaths, and ensuing cannibalism, as par for the course. Just that little bit showed just how dire their situation was.

beckyh2112 March 3 2007, 02:01:29 UTC

I try to find a balance in my Elita characterization - how I think she should have been in regards to the history given her in the show vs. how she was actually portrayed in the show. I hope I'm keeping her in spitting distance of her show characterization - otherwise, I just have a shiny OC wearing Elita's nametag.

*stops rambling*

Thank you very much for your kind comments!