Unfinished Fic Wednesday!

[_samalander]

Hello, patrons of This Bar!

Today being Wednesday, brings us a snippet of unfinished fic from alphaflyer(To be featured on unfinished fic Wednesday, sent 100-1000 words of fic to bc.unfinished@gmail.com, which your LJ name, warnings and a rating

Comments

[vivichick]

Well. I, for one, would be interested to see where this goes. I really appreciated the subtle "foot conversation" under the table.
I hope you do decide to continue this Fic.

[alphaflyer]

Thanks -- I think the Valentine undercurrents will have to go though. (No longer seasonally appropriate and quite possibly the red herring that threw me off the scent.) Also not sure how dark -- as opposed to satirical -- it needs to be.

[delle]

I am intrigued! please to be continuing????

[bugeyedmonster]

Interesting start. I might have to stalk you in hopes of seeing the rest of this fic...

[shenshen77]

I really like it and I would love to see this continued. There is so much potential for dark and gritty and yet you set Clint and Nat up for a lot of snark and banter.

I loved the foot conversation, it shows how well they understand each other. If you want to set Clint up for withdrawing into himself, shooting arrows at the imagined head of the cult leader, I'd say you'd probably better go for darker. He's no stranger to child abuse, so I think it wouldn't take much to set him off. But to have this reaction to it... So there you have it, my two cents ;)

[alphaflyer]

Thanks to all for your encouragement -- that really means a lot. I think maybe once I get rid of the Valentine connection (and the inherent need for a spot of fluffiness) I might just find the necessary snarky darkness for a relatively pure partnership/mission fic. It was the detour into possible romance elements that threw me off, I guess, 'coz it just didn't fit.