(fic) it's hard to know what you want

[balphas]

it's hard to know what you want
The Social Network
Mark/Eduardo pre-slash, PG-13
disclaimer: Most emphatically not mine, also this fic is based on the dramatized versions of Mark & Eduardo featured in the film The Social Network, most certainly not the real people because I know nothing about them and would be very silly to assume otherwise &c ad

Comments

[4rightchords_]

awesome. totally awesome. part two please.

[nikkikoala90]

Very good, I really enjoyed this. Didn't seem that out-of-character to me. Like, I can see Mark practicing again and again what to say, trying to crack Eduardo like he is lines of code. And the breakfast scene! I could totally HEAR their voices. Good job! Please continue! :)

[andaere]

Gah! Sad! But good!

I like that even though this had a sad ending and angsty future stuff (whoops, I used the word! xD), you interspersed it with fluffy flashbacks. I loved drunk!Mark, and the cuddling on the couch. And the awkwardness of the conversation during breakfast, especially Mark trying to make offers of friendship (i.e. watching lame movies).
I think you really got both their characters down. And I also think you've done a really good job differentiating between the future and past characters. It's hard to explain, but I feel like the Mark in your flashbacks is obviously different from the Mark in the future (well, I guess it's the present, gah, I'm confusing myself). Like, the future/present Mark is colder, but regrets more. Does that make sense?

You write really well. I especially liked this part:

He falls asleep smelling like missed opportunities and mistakes and disappointment, and won't that be funny in a few years' time, when he can look back on all of this and say, 'wow, Mark, look at what you did, weren't you

[learnthemusic]

This is perfect. I love that Mark misses the simple things because he's a very simple person - not inwardly, but in regard to belongings and such. And that Mark doesn't really want to apologize for the dilution is so spot-on. He was definitely doing what was best for the company, so there was no reason to be sorry for that. He just needed to be sorry for hurting Eduardo, which I'm assuming he figures out eventually.

A sequel to this would be fantastic! Or anything more from you, actually. It's very good. :)

Aside: I love the "stuff", "fun" and "nice" bit; it's just too cute!

[feelingsofine]

This was so lovely! I really feel like you got the dialogue spot on - it really fit in with the movie, and the characters, I felt, were very well done. Kudos! A sequel would be beautiful ;)