The Bathouse rock
Filing through the few stories for Batman at AFF.net, I decided I'd try and use one here. How easy does that sound, considering I only have 15 stories at my disposal? Easier than you think. You could go and read the whole thing while high on Elvis music or you could simply view the small quotes I took. Have fun.
Before I get started, would somebody be kind enough to tell me how to put the fandom into the title so it also lands in the listings to the left? That would be super.
"rouges to a dance number Other"
This is all you get as a blurb. Wow, I really want to read this, as my mind simply cannot compute how rouge is dancing or even acting of its own accord.
Maybe the story will be enlightening. I am reading it as I am doing this. I did read a bit ahead, so it is as bad as you are probably contemplating.
there, in arkham the cells showing shadows of the rouges either sitting, or standing. cool-like. then the music plays, joker moves his hips to the guitar, then, the light shows the joker dress in his orange prision suit, his hair was an elvis style, his lips curled in an elvis presley-way he wore a leather jacket and he sang
Okay, deep breath. This is the opening paragraph. What are your thoughts? Does the Joker now have magical clothes that change between cotton and leather? Does he have something for rubbing his hips up against guitars? Is he going to sing? Sadly so.
*riddler played along the music "riddler boy from illinois went crash boom bang the whole rhythm section was the purple gang lets rock!" he grab on the poll of his cell and slide sexeh like
I suppose even criminal master-minds need a music break. Too bad they can't pause in their music for two seconds to punctuate. As far as I have read, not many fullstops have appeared yet, nor have capital letters made much of an appearance either.
"harvey said to harley - your the cutest nutterbird i ever did see i sure would bedelighted with your company, comon and do the nutterhouse rock with me!
Listening to the song in my head and lining things up word for word, there is a few beats not covered. And Two-Fae said all this and then collapsed on the floor, having not taken a breath for the most of this.
"bane was sitting of a block of stone way over in the corner weepin all alone the warden said, hey, buddy, dont you be no square. if you cant find a partner use a wooden scarface sitting on that chair lets rock!
First we are short a few words, now we are over-compensating. And being a big fan of the series, I can tell you now that Bane DOES NOT CRY! Try putting in a different character. Scarecrow would be hard pressed for a date, considering how thin and lanky he is.
I think that's enough. Even for an average song, I think it has been torn to ribbons badly already. As for the story itself, it isn't much longer than what I have posted. But there is enough to make you want to scream. Fans of the old cartoon will be so impressed. Surely this should be in the basic FanFiction site, considering the lack of violence, sex, blood, character death, etc.
The thing only has one review, and it was basically 'I like, but edit it.' How anyone could like this is completely beyond me. What do you think?
Before I get started, would somebody be kind enough to tell me how to put the fandom into the title so it also lands in the listings to the left? That would be super.
"rouges to a dance number Other"
This is all you get as a blurb. Wow, I really want to read this, as my mind simply cannot compute how rouge is dancing or even acting of its own accord.
Maybe the story will be enlightening. I am reading it as I am doing this. I did read a bit ahead, so it is as bad as you are probably contemplating.
there, in arkham the cells showing shadows of the rouges either sitting, or standing. cool-like. then the music plays, joker moves his hips to the guitar, then, the light shows the joker dress in his orange prision suit, his hair was an elvis style, his lips curled in an elvis presley-way he wore a leather jacket and he sang
Okay, deep breath. This is the opening paragraph. What are your thoughts? Does the Joker now have magical clothes that change between cotton and leather? Does he have something for rubbing his hips up against guitars? Is he going to sing? Sadly so.
*riddler played along the music "riddler boy from illinois went crash boom bang the whole rhythm section was the purple gang lets rock!" he grab on the poll of his cell and slide sexeh like
I suppose even criminal master-minds need a music break. Too bad they can't pause in their music for two seconds to punctuate. As far as I have read, not many fullstops have appeared yet, nor have capital letters made much of an appearance either.
"harvey said to harley - your the cutest nutterbird i ever did see i sure would bedelighted with your company, comon and do the nutterhouse rock with me!
Listening to the song in my head and lining things up word for word, there is a few beats not covered. And Two-Fae said all this and then collapsed on the floor, having not taken a breath for the most of this.
"bane was sitting of a block of stone way over in the corner weepin all alone the warden said, hey, buddy, dont you be no square. if you cant find a partner use a wooden scarface sitting on that chair lets rock!
First we are short a few words, now we are over-compensating. And being a big fan of the series, I can tell you now that Bane DOES NOT CRY! Try putting in a different character. Scarecrow would be hard pressed for a date, considering how thin and lanky he is.
I think that's enough. Even for an average song, I think it has been torn to ribbons badly already. As for the story itself, it isn't much longer than what I have posted. But there is enough to make you want to scream. Fans of the old cartoon will be so impressed. Surely this should be in the basic FanFiction site, considering the lack of violence, sex, blood, character death, etc.
The thing only has one review, and it was basically 'I like, but edit it.' How anyone could like this is completely beyond me. What do you think?