This is an impressive multi-character scene -- everybody sounds precisely like themselves, even the characters with less of a voice in the original series. There's nothing clunky or sloggy about this -- the narrative keeps up, much is revealed, and the characters are slowly catching up, while Lulu's practically flailing and hopping around.
I like how neatly this bookends the original Machina war -- another experimental weapon, the destruction of the Fayth rather than the creation of them. Very tidy. Polished.
Lulu's flailing -- yes! I had meant to make her so much more methodical, but instead she's coming out like game-Auron ... jumping at openings, trying to catch the right moment, do the right thing at the right time.
But since she's stuck as Sin, half the time it just blows up in her face.
Hmmm. This chapter was the devil to write, because different characters knew different things: for some of them, this is the first time they've heard a lot of what's happened (Sin's attacks on the temples, Vegnagun
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This is an impressive multi-character scene -- everybody sounds precisely like themselves, even the characters with less of a voice in the original series. There's nothing clunky or sloggy about this -- the narrative keeps up, much is revealed, and the characters are slowly catching up, while Lulu's practically flailing and hopping around.
I like how neatly this bookends the original Machina war -- another experimental weapon, the destruction of the Fayth rather than the creation of them. Very tidy. Polished.
Yay!
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I had meant to make her so much more methodical, but instead she's coming out like game-Auron ... jumping at openings, trying to catch the right moment, do the right thing at the right time.
But since she's stuck as Sin, half the time it just blows up in her face.
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