Hmmm. This chapter was the devil to write, because different characters knew different things: for some of them, this is the first time they've heard a lot of what's happened (Sin's attacks on the temples, Vegnagun).
Also, to some extent, I'm recapping because I've introduced so many plot threads, it seemed like a good idea to lay them all on the table, at least once.
But on the other hand, you're right: lots of exposition, leaving little time for decision-making.
I'm hand-waving some of the decision making, because I imagine it actually took hours and hours of debate and argument after Lucil's proclamation (especially with Baralai and Shelinda). So I used the dramatic device of a vote. A bit contrived and hand-wavy.
The chapter I'm writing now is giving me fits because I didn't entirely "chew" the debate and objections that might've been raised in this chapter.
Thanks as usual for nitpicks. Heh. I added in that sentence about weeping blood in the last pass -- I've had Isaaru dabbing at his eyes, but was afraid it was too subtle. Maybe I'll revert to the earlier version.
Also, to some extent, I'm recapping because I've introduced so many plot threads, it seemed like a good idea to lay them all on the table, at least once.
But on the other hand, you're right: lots of exposition, leaving little time for decision-making.
I'm hand-waving some of the decision making, because I imagine it actually took hours and hours of debate and argument after Lucil's proclamation (especially with Baralai and Shelinda). So I used the dramatic device of a vote. A bit contrived and hand-wavy.
The chapter I'm writing now is giving me fits because I didn't entirely "chew" the debate and objections that might've been raised in this chapter.
Thanks as usual for nitpicks. Heh. I added in that sentence about weeping blood in the last pass -- I've had Isaaru dabbing at his eyes, but was afraid it was too subtle. Maybe I'll revert to the earlier version.
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