Fabulous to read this. I really like what you did with the Satedans and that Melena is still alive for Ronon. I like the fight scenes here as well. Glad you kept the transmitter in this one as well. Poor John and Teyla. I like how devastating the Wraith are here too. Looking forward to seeing if they manage to get the ZPM or if they find the expedition. I also really like all the interpersonal relationships you're establishing and that you focused on POVs with the newer people rather than Vala and Jehen and Mer. Nice to see what Teyla and Radek and Lindsey and Janet are thinking about their new situations.
I like the idea of contrasting the Satedans and the expedition in this: both high tech societies, both small groups cut off from that same tech infrastructure with limited resources and the inevitable superior attitude in regard to the lower tech worlds. In fact, they end up doing similar things: hiring out their soldiers and weapons. But the Satedans have an unethical leader while the expedition survivors have Sam, who is both military and civilian and a woman. Of course, the Satedans don't see any way out of Pegasus, so they're looking to re-settle, while the expedition is hunting an escape, so the Tau'ri aren't interested in taking over somewhere like Belkan.
And I love that this story has shaped up showcase the women and supporting characters. I didn't start out to do it, but it has. Plus, having Jehan and Mer in an established relationship from the beginning freed me from writing this as a 'how they came together' fic. Or even a 'how they got back together' fic.
Sigh! I love this story! I love how the women are driving so much of this story. There is enough McShep to please us die hard fans but they are just a part of the story. Vala is a kick ass hoot. Teyla is harder, more ruthless, but still essentially canon Teyla. Tempered by fire like she tempered those bantos. Lindsey though, that one has really captured my imagination.
"Oh, we're pirates." And then Being a pirate had been supposed to be fun, not... this. She's facinating. Everyone else too but I have to go to bed before I fall over. Thank you for this story. I look forward to seeing Sam.
Yeah, I don't know what happened. I never set out to write something with the women forefronted, I just had the idea of John and Vala are space pirates, ooooh, cool! Maybe it shaped up this way because I structured it with Mer and Jehan already in their relationship, so there's no focus on them or that. I'm happy with the way it has developed, in any case. The boys don't have to be the stars to play a significant part.
I am so pleased that people like what I've done with Novak. It's so interesting to grow a character that is almost a caricature in canon. Up until this part, everything that had happened had really made her life better, but I tend to break my characters, so it was inevitable she'd take some damage. Now she's been tempered in the fire like the rest of the crew.
I need a kick in the head (or the ass or something) because I should have had another part done by now, but I've been dead in the water since Christmas.
Maybe the feedback will remind my subconscious I like feedback and don't get it unless I write.
Hey, it's fine by me! As I said I didn't even get to reading this part until just now. Although I am definitely looking forward to the next one, especially after this part hooked me all over again
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And maybe I´d wonder that so many main characters (all of them except Mer and Jehan, actually) are women, but it seems very natural and I believe you that you didn´t plan it that way.
It wasn't planned, but when it started developing this way I kind of ran with it.
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And I love that this story has shaped up showcase the women and supporting characters. I didn't start out to do it, but it has. Plus, having Jehan and Mer in an established relationship from the beginning freed me from writing this as a 'how they came together' fic. Or even a 'how they got back together' fic.
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"Oh, we're pirates." And then Being a pirate had been supposed to be fun, not... this. She's facinating. Everyone else too but I have to go to bed before I fall over. Thank you for this story. I look forward to seeing Sam.
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I am so pleased that people like what I've done with Novak. It's so interesting to grow a character that is almost a caricature in canon. Up until this part, everything that had happened had really made her life better, but I tend to break my characters, so it was inevitable she'd take some damage. Now she's been tempered in the fire like the rest of the crew.
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It continues to be fascinating and wonderful.
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I need a kick in the head (or the ass or something) because I should have had another part done by now, but I've been dead in the water since Christmas.
Maybe the feedback will remind my subconscious I like feedback and don't get it unless I write.
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And maybe I´d wonder that so many main characters (all of them except Mer and Jehan, actually) are women, but it seems very natural and I believe you that you didn´t plan it that way.
It wasn't planned, but when it started developing this way I kind of ran with it.
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