FIC: The Train Goes Slow (dS, F/K, NC-17)

[atrata]

Title: The Train Goes Slow
Fandom: due South
Pairing: Fraser/Kowalski
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Ray is patience fucking personified, and he hasn't wanted to punch Fraser in days.
Length: ~11,500 words
A/N: For murklins, who did not help me write this story. (This may be the first time that has ever happened.) It's un-betaed, so if you see anything that needs

Comments

[rchelsea2005]

I have this habit of doing these odd, fragmented little reviews, so I hope you'll pardon the nutso :P

"You don't care about yourself, that's fine, but you gotta think about me. I can't-- this is gonna kill me, Fraser, okay? This thing is gonna kill me."

That is seriously...oh, geez. Fantastic, and totally Ray. Just so you know.

I also found this Ray sits back on his heels and nods a few times. "Yeah," he says, pushing himself to his feet. "Yeah. It figures we can only talk when you've got tape on your mouth. Okay. I'll have to remember that." to be quite amusing. Very in-character.

You also have a great mastery of the UST angle--the way you portray the tension between them in this is really well done.

doesn't know how to tell Fraser how his eyes look right now, like a storm over the lake, raging around him. I love that image there, by the way.

And that ending? YESSS.

[atrata]

Hey, the more nutso, the better, as far as I'm concerned. *grin*

I'm very glad you liked the Ray voice... he's so distinctive that I was worried I wouldn't get it right. So, yes. Thanks very much. :)

[cyberducks]

That was so deliciously tense and uncomfortable at times. They are like a bad marriage with the dysfunction and the non-communicating one minute - and then the next minute they are beautiful and in synch.

However, Dief has more sense than both of them combined and I wanted to shake Fraser something good throughout - I could not put up with him if he was my partner.

Very well written and uncliched!

[atrata]

Thanks! I am totally with you -- I would not be able to deal with Fraser. I'd want to, but man. MAN. And I think I probably overplayed my Fraser Is Impossible hand with this story, but I'm okay with that for now. Also, "deliciously tense and uncomfortable" is pretty much always what I am trying to achieve, with everything I write, so it's very nice to hear. Thanks again. :)

[innocentsmith]

asdfjkl;asthwqa;lkhgtlahgawlkej!!!!

With the tension, and the sex, and the sexual tension, and...god, from the first section I was like, OMG, guys, can you just rip each other's clothes off already? And it just kept going and going; I love all of the cases ("which would have been one of the stupidest things Ray had ever heard, except he's been working with Fraser for a while now," HEE!), how they both get to be total badasses. And Dead!Bob making his appearance - I love how Ray sort of verbally freaks out for a while there but really, it's not even an issue for him, it doesn't change anything between them - and Dief! being smarter than all of the humans put together!

And then there was the bit where Fraser licks Ray's hand in front of God and everyone, and OMG, guys, you are so fucked upI can't even go into the kitchen sex, but...good god. *dead

[atrata]

*flail* Thank you! I really kind of suck at responding to feedback, but your comment makes me dance around my room a little. Or possibly a lot.

... yeah, I don't know what to say. I love Dief and I love Dead!Bob and I superlove Ray dealing with them, because I really think that Ray just doesn't care. He knows it's weird, and whatever, he'll deal with it. And I feel that is awesome. So I am pleased that you also think it is awesome!

Also, I really wanted to have Ray tell Fraser that he is a paper ballerina, but I couldn't quite make it fit, so I cut it. But yeah, you're right, these two are totally and completely fucked up and hopeless and therefore entirely perfect. Thanks again. :)

[malnpudl]

Jesus god in heaven. Forgive the irreverence, but I'm beyond coherence, here. That was one of the best things I've read in... wow. WOW. Jesus.

Yeah, okay. I want to say "Where have you been all my life?" but instead I'll settle for the more appropriate "Welcome to the fandom."

[atrata]

Ha! I have been avoiding this fandom for, what, since the show was on, actually! That is where I've been. Thank god I got over that nonsense, is what I have to say, and also, thank you very much for your kind words. I'm glad you liked the story. :)

[evalangui]

Woa, this is long. *relishes like crazy*

[atrata]

Thank you! I sort of came to the conclusion that this story was going to go on indefinitely, because they're just on this roller-coaster and that's the way it is, so I wrapped it up when it seemed reasonable. Glad you enjoyed. :)