[Final Fantasy VI] Details

[athyn]

Characters/Pairings: Locke/Celes, Leo/Celes
Rating: PG
Notes: Writen for the Summer 2007 round of springkink. The prompt was "Sensory enhancement: Differences, as a Magitek Knight." ~2600 words. Many thanks to shanaqui and mithrigil for giving it a read-over :)
Warnings: Spoilers up to the Floating Continent.
Disclaimer: Final Fantasy VI belongs to Squaresoft. I own

Comments

SEV'S AWESOME COMMENTS

[first_seventhe]

First of all: <3, <3, and more <3. OMGCeles. I love how Locke is "the treasure hunter" -- as if she's scared to call him by his name, scared to let him close, and yet she does call him by his preferred epithet rather than 'thief'. I love the little details Celes chooses to take note of, even if they are 'useless'.

Comments, one small edit, suggestions (aka invitation to meta at me lots):

She can hear each noise the other prisoners make. - This sentence stands out as very general, whereas every fact that preceded it was a very specific detail. Maybe elaboration on the noises, or an example?

She is the highest-ranking traitor in all Gestahl's long reign, and she sits in her cell and waits for him to kill her. Um ouch this line KILLS ME. ♥

It has also provided her with the opportunity to hone certain of the gifts from her infusion: she had always recognized that her senses were sharper than most, but had had little opportunity to hone that ability. - I am your repeat phrasings XD

Re: Esper attack: She smelled smoke and

Re: SEV'S AWESOME COMMENTS

[lassarina]

UR IN MY LJ'S MAKIN' THE COMMENTS

Um. You make an excellent point about her not sensing Terra's magic; I will fix this in the edit/redux/whatever. And you are totally not the only person to catch the traitor line XD I will tl;dr at you further in email.

Re: SEV'S AWESOME COMMENTS

[first_seventhe]

IM IN UR LJ SPAMMIN UR STORY

The traitor line is killer. Just sayin'.