Fic: Don't Want To Leave You

[astreamofstars]

Written for the ar_drabbles challenge, 'afterwards'.

Drabble is a sequel to "Don't Want To Hurt You"

Title: Don't Want To Leave You
Word Count: 300
Rating: K
Spoilers: Daybreak

Comments

[frakcancer]

she knew that he did, knew the kiss she pressed to his forehead resonated through his heart, knew the words she whispered into his ear found their way into his thoughts.

I think the only proper response to this is a quote from Searider Falcon:

I wasn't afraid to die. I was afraid of the emptiness that I felt inside. I couldn't feel anything. And that's what scared me. You came into my thoughts. I felt them. It felt good.

[astreamofstars]

Yet again, you manage to find things in my drabbles I hadn't noticed when I was writing them. That quote works absolutely perfectly for this piece!

Thank you :)

[sln1]

'Don't Want To Hurt You' was a wonderfully intimate and touching drabble and you have more than done it justice with this equally beautiful sequel. You have evoked a deep sense of peace for Laura which is not unduly disturbed by the fact that in spite of the inexorable pull of the shore, she needs to offer Bill some last comfort before she goes and that she has the determination to make that possible.

The ending has pathos and hope. Bill won't go on for long without her but Laura's conviction that he will follow her is absolute.

Great work. Thank you.

[astreamofstars]

I'm really glad it worked for you. You know how sometimes when you write, it just flows, and sometimes it's a struggle to get the words out of your head? The first one flowed, and this one was a struggle.

I hope that sensing a little bit of Laura after she passed away would give Bill the peace he needed and the knowledge he'd see her again. So hopefully this makes 'Don't Want To Hurt You' a tiny bit less sad.

Thank you for the comments :)

[astreamofstars]

You're very welcome. Thank you for the comment :)

[northeto]

She’d known it was coming, could feel it in her bones and in her breath, but she’d wanted that last moment to be beautiful, joyous, and so she’d simply gazed from the raptor window, letting the colours and the light and the wonder wash over her, feeling his steady warmth by her side.

What a opener!

This ficlet is absolutely gorgeous, and heart-wrenching in the best sense of the word.

Your descriptions are wonderful, the first two paragraphs in particular and "the son of her heart".

Thank you for such a fantastic piece.

[astreamofstars]

I adore Laura and Billy. I try to mention him whenever I can in my fics.

Writing descriptions is one of my favourite things to do, so I'm really glad they worked for you!

Thank you for the comments :)

[cutemaggie]

amazing ... &hearts

[astreamofstars]

Thank you :)