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Loving You Was What I Was Trying To Do - Lincoln/Veronica

Mar 14, 2006 15:26

Title: Loving You Was What I Was Trying To Do
Author: Aspen Snow
Pairing: Lincoln/Veronica
Summary: A collection of sentences delving into the relationshp of Lincoln/Veronica.
Author's Note: Written for the 1sentence challenge ( Read more... )

prison break fics

Comments 24

thelana March 14 2006, 23:58:12 UTC

Oh, so pretty I especially love "he wondered if it was possible to love the way a person slept." and "the idle way she twisted her hair around her finger was a memory he wished he had never forgotten.".

aspensnow March 15 2006, 02:44:39 UTC

Thanks!

halfshellvenus March 15 2006, 00:07:30 UTC

I loved "Motion" (for its restfulness) and "Harm" (for its darkness). But the phrasing in "Precious" of
until he had been locked up in a place too small for remembering
really got me.

You're off to a great start, I see :D

aspensnow March 15 2006, 02:45:14 UTC

Yes, a good start I think. This challenge is attacking me with ideas.

certainthings March 15 2006, 00:46:47 UTC

I like the quiet way you write.

and he thinks about asking her if the roads are still black and long.

That stood out the most to me. So lonely.

aspensnow March 15 2006, 02:46:23 UTC

Thanks so much!

I worry sometimes, that I write Lincoln too much as a lonely character. But then I realize he is lonely and he must be written this way. =)

resounding_echo March 15 2006, 02:00:43 UTC

Oooh, I'm excited you got this one sentence thing!

They are all lovely, but I'm particularly fond of Harm.

aspensnow March 15 2006, 02:47:33 UTC

Me too! I'm excited too!

I'm glad you liked Harm, I firmly believe that there had to have been dark moments like this in their relationship.

thelana March 15 2006, 13:00:39 UTC

Oooh, I'm excited you got this one sentence thing!

*rooting for her to get inspired to expand some of these sentences into stories*

thelana March 15 2006, 13:00:14 UTC

Oh, you are fast!

He learned she was ticklish when he taking her shirt off

Is there a missing word, like either he takes or he was taking?

thelana March 15 2006, 13:34:38 UTC

I love Blur and Hold is just such a sweet mental image, same goes for Hide. I totally love the concept of Vision. And I so adore Torn.

He had never thought about keeping her safe, just keeping her, and when he hears about men with black suits and silencers hunting her he thinks that maybe she should have tried.

This one confuses me. Tried what?

Oh and I really love this one too:

Prison food is stagnant and bland, there is nothing about it than can be savored, which is why, when she kisses him again, he tastes only the peaches she had for lunch

aspensnow March 15 2006, 20:32:38 UTC

I'm so glad you these, once I started writing them I just couldn't make myself stop, which isn't really a bad thing. =)

And yes, the word was is missing from above, and as for the Safe sentence, it was supposed to say: He had never thought about keeping her safe, just keeping her, and when he hears about men with black suits and silencers hunting her he thinks that maybe he should have tried.

Thanks for pointing those out...I honestly don't think I would have ever caught them =)

certainthings March 16 2006, 03:56:28 UTC

Tried to keep her safe.