Ficathon Entry for the_girl_20

[kjaneway]

Title: Birthday blues
Author: kjaneway
Written for: the_girl_20
Prompt: Birthday
Word count: ca. 1600
Author's notes: Time constraints have left this piece unbetad and unproofed. I'd like to apologise for that, at this point. Also, I may have been projecting just a touch.

Comments

[the_girl_20]

This has a lovely fairy-tale type feel to it. I love how you've woven the story together around their building relationship. Absolutely enchanting.

Love the snarkiness at the beginning about collections and card signing. I swear, in my office everyone must have at least three birthdays each :)

There are tons of adorable character moments but I've picked out my favourites:

When old Bill Godwin retired, the powers that be had seen fit to give the vacant DCI post to a young turk from the Met, by the name of Sullivan. - I am now thinking about Rod Stewart songs. But I do love how Sullivan is sort of like the fairy-godmother of the story. So to speak.

The day Sullivan introduced Scribbs as her new partner, Ash nearly resigned. - Hee! And also, awww.

Sullivan wasn't in the least bit surprised to see them arrive in a shared taxi, and he watched them watch each other, all evening. - I am liking Sullivan a whole lot.

Their eyes met, and the world stopped. - I actually teared up a little bit at that.

I adored this. Thank you. :)

[kjaneway]

I adored this. Thank you. :)

Aww. Thank you!

I do actually have several thousand words of the other prompt you sent written, but it appears to be turning into a bit of an epic, and I've already got two of those that need finishing!

[the_girl_20]

I do actually have several thousand words of the other prompt you sent written

*squees quite a bit*

[kjaneway]

*squees quite a bit*

Hehehe! I thought you might appreciate that news.

[hirai]

That was wonderful. I loved the way you progressed through the show's timeline. *tosses you a cookie*

[kjaneway]

Ooh! Cookie! Ta.

That was wonderful.

Thank you.

[kjaneway]

Finally, some background material.

It struck me that when we first meet them, they've clearly been partners for long enough to have formed something of a bond and I wondered where that came from, given they're such radically different personalities.

Very nice one.

Thank you!

[ralst]

I loved all the background information and Sullivan's quietly supportive role in the whole thing. Lovely.

[kjaneway]

Thank you.

[ethelthefrog]

Beautiful. Love the world-stopping bit.

[kjaneway]

Love the world-stopping bit.

It's a cliche. I know it's a cliche, but like Ash said... they're only cliche's because they actually happen. :-)