Comments | arrankaara: Fanfiction : Bleach Drabbles (#3-4)

arrankaara

Fanfiction : Bleach Drabbles (#3-4)

Sep 28, 2006 13:13

Title: Beautiful.
Type: Fanfiction : Bleach.
Prompt: Themes taken from sanbantaichou. #3 Cuffed; caged.
Disclaimer: I don't own Bleach. Kubo Tite does, and some other people that I don't know.
Rating: PG13.
Word Count:
Summary: An Ichimaru-centric drabble. Gin reflects on the state of his vice-captain. [ GinKira ]. Drabble-esque.
Author's Note: Need to start ( Read more... )

!character: ichimaru gin, !fanfiction, !pairing: ginkira, !character: kira izuru, !fandom: bleach

Comments 22

ajbunk September 28 2006, 07:26:39 UTC

Yo! A quick note. I think Byakuya is the captain of the sixth division and not fourth. I think the fourth is the medical division. But I could be wrong.

So what I was wondering was if Gin was taunting Byakuya? Because if it was an unitentional mistake that might be a wonderful mistake. Depending if you want to play up on insinuated insults.

arrankaara September 28 2006, 11:45:26 UTC

You're perfectly right. *is bricked* I was actually thinking what Byakuya's division is and because of the lack of sleep and everything else, I misinterpreted 'roku'. Which is really embarrassing.

Thank you for the correction. Edit checked!

ajbunk September 28 2006, 15:52:57 UTC

Glad to help. I don't mind reading over anything you write as long as I know the base series if it is fanfiction. (I guess I don't like to read anything I don't know the base context to.)

arrankaara September 28 2006, 19:05:03 UTC

I think it's pointless to read something that you know nothing of, anyway. It's hard to follow the characterizations of the characters then.

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kazura_uyurin September 28 2006, 11:22:41 UTC

As the previous user mentioned, Byakuya's from the 6th Division.

I like your portrayal of Gin in the second drabble. He seems very much like the type to do that. Although Byakuya feeling like strangling Gin sounded a little off... somehow.

arrankaara September 28 2006, 11:46:51 UTC

My fault definitely, and it has been corrected. Thank you for pointing it out.

I think Bya's the type to want to secretly strangle people all the time. Because he's suppressed like that. I know, I don't write the best Bya-chin. @___@

kazura_uyurin September 30 2006, 08:47:06 UTC

Well... maybe not strangle. But shred them to itsy bitsy pieces? XD

arrankaara September 30 2006, 09:21:52 UTC

XD Yeah, that'll do too!

theoddestportal September 28 2006, 13:58:58 UTC

I thought you portrayed Gin very well. Looking forward to more ficlets! Perhaps Byakuya could have been a lot more in control, but I suppose there are certain liberties which you can take with characters, and in this case it is perfectly acceptable for Bya to behave in the manner you described. (It's just that we don't see it explicitly stated in the anime or manga?)

arrankaara September 28 2006, 19:09:14 UTC

Well, there are like... 30 more themes or something from sanbantaichou that I haven't used. So, there'll be lots more to come, I suppose.

I like Gin, simply because he has a macabre sense of humour. He is more complicated than he seems, and that's just very appealing to me. I'm glad to know that I've captured his portrayal well. And about Bya... I think he acts like that because of the stress. To kill Rukia, or not to kill. He's melodramatic like that. >____< But maybe I'm just bad at doing him.

flo_nelja September 28 2006, 20:50:22 UTC

I looove he way you describe Kira !
"incoherent mutters and shifts of strained muscles"
And every part of the first one...

The second one wxas good too, and my favourite part is Gin's doodles.

arrankaara September 28 2006, 23:55:53 UTC

Thank you~ I like Kira when he's desperate, so it gives me some sort of a perverse glee to write his situation from Gin's POV.

Glad you approve of 'em!

enjolras September 29 2006, 02:22:53 UTC

Ooh, extremely nice. The first drabble gives me chills. Gin is so very creepy, but in a very nice way. And I like to get creeped out, which I hope doesn't sound weird. ^^

Someone mentioned that it seems weird for Byakuya to want to strangle Gin. While he seems very composed on the outside, I don't think it was too far out of the ordinary for you to take that step and write it in. I'm sure that everyone has wanted to do that at some point in their life. And considering the circumstances in the drabble, I can understand Byakuya's point of view very well. xD

arrankaara September 29 2006, 04:21:42 UTC

Creepy!Gin is my favouritest Gin of all! He's kinda like this nice drug that people like me get addicted too so easily. XDDDD

Spot on about Byakuya, seeing that that is exactly what I think when I first started writing that part. I just hope that he isn't too OOC. Bya is repressed, really. *pets him fondly*