I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And I'm really glad you liked those parts--I actually wrote the footsie thing and the new world line/image/symbol before I wrote the rest of the fic--and then had to figure out a way to get them to that point *g*
Part 1 (I've reached LJ's comment limit, apparently)gabsyFebruary 26 2010, 18:35:56 UTC
I'm not sure I have the words needed to express quite exactly what I'm feeling right now. I feel a little short of breath, if only because this is better than I could have ever imagined
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Re: Part 1 (I've reached LJ's comment limit, apparently)gabsyFebruary 26 2010, 18:38:20 UTC
QUOTE TIME: “Hmm,” Holmes said, disbelievingly, and Watson heard him moving closer. In the pitch black, Holmes nearly tripped over him, then, kneeling, had to pat his hands down Watson’s body until he could find the affected limb.
“I am a doctor, you know,” Watson protested weakly, “I think I’d be able to tell if something were truly wrong.”
“Ah,” said Holmes, “but would you hide the extent of your injuries through some misguided desire not to worry me? I rather think you would.” His hands moved methodically down Watson’s leg, expertly prodding hip, knee, ankle, before coming to rest, steady and oddly proprietary, on the still-shaking muscles of his thigh.
As he submitted to the examination, it came to Watson, incongruously, that he would have recognized Holmes’s touch anywhere. Even in the total darkness, he would have been able to distinguish his strong, narrow fingers from all others. Somehow, they were as clever as the rest of him, as incisive. I just love that Holmes has a proprietary look on his face, the level of care he put
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Re: Part 1 (I've reached LJ's comment limit, apparently)gabsyFebruary 26 2010, 18:39:08 UTC
I'm not a fan of stories where suddenly they call each other Sherlock and John all the time for no reason HOWEVER, the way Holmes says his name once, in this most serious and delicate moment, was just perfect. It gave this moment an added intimacy
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Re: Part 1 (I've reached LJ's comment limit, apparently)ariadnes_stringFebruary 27 2010, 04:40:53 UTC
Phew, I'm glad the one "John" worked okay--I feel the same way about them using first names. I don't think I could ever write Watson calling him "Sherlock"--the syllables just break the mood...
And yay! I'm glad the title reveal worked--the other phrase, "the next county is America," is one I've always liked, though it's really a sad phrase about emigration--I wanted to play on it's good aspect.
And again, thank YOU--the fact that you liked the fic, and this lovely feedback, made my day, my week, and possibly the whole rest of 2010!
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The tenderness at the end made my heart melt.
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
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I'm so glad you enjoyed the fic--thanks for reading and commenting!
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“Hmm,” Holmes said, disbelievingly, and Watson heard him moving closer. In the pitch black, Holmes nearly tripped over him, then, kneeling, had to pat his hands down Watson’s body until he could find the affected limb.
“I am a doctor, you know,” Watson protested weakly, “I think I’d be able to tell if something were truly wrong.”
“Ah,” said Holmes, “but would you hide the extent of your injuries through some misguided desire not to worry me? I rather think you would.” His hands moved methodically down Watson’s leg, expertly prodding hip, knee, ankle, before coming to rest, steady and oddly proprietary, on the still-shaking muscles of his thigh.
As he submitted to the examination, it came to Watson, incongruously, that he would have recognized Holmes’s touch anywhere. Even in the total darkness, he would have been able to distinguish his strong, narrow fingers from all others. Somehow, they were as clever as the rest of him, as incisive. I just love that Holmes has a proprietary look on his face, the level of care he put ( ... )
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And yay! I'm glad the title reveal worked--the other phrase, "the next county is America," is one I've always liked, though it's really a sad phrase about emigration--I wanted to play on it's good aspect.
And again, thank YOU--the fact that you liked the fic, and this lovely feedback, made my day, my week, and possibly the whole rest of 2010!
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