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arabianred

SM Monthly Submission - Kaidou

Jun 20, 2009 10:38

Title: If Only She Knew
Author: Arabian Red
Theme: Kaidou
Genre: Adult
Version: AR
Rating: NC-17

NOTES: Interlude to Photograph and Spider but could stand alone.

( Mad dash to kill off prompts! )

rei, kaidou

Comments 20

jenbunny June 20 2009, 18:41:08 UTC

Loved it! Just as much as the other two ^_^ can't wait for more

arabianred June 21 2009, 00:00:13 UTC

Aww thanks! I remember you said you had a hunch before, about who the traitor was. Were you right??

jenbunny June 21 2009, 06:58:46 UTC

no thank heavens, I was worried that it might be Usa/Mamoru. ^_^ I am sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo happy that it wasn't.

venusorbit1 June 20 2009, 21:55:23 UTC

HOLY SHIT.

MAN, your Kaidou is one creepy assed mofo! It was HIM who ordered that hit?? Well, his wife, but by extension...WHAT THE FUCK. That is so...perfect and ARRRGGH now it all fits! Oh shit Rei is going to go fucking postal on him, for good reason, and...DAMN. DAMN DAMN DAMN. DAMN you have reduced me to incoherent blathering! SHit, that was a good twist. I was wondering who it would be..for some reason I thought it would be Mamoru (hurrr..my theories are always off) and you had me going for a little bit: I thought Kaidou was fucking MINAKO at the beginning and my eyeballs popped out of my head and rolled away.

She doesn’t need your help. … he wanted her, more than he would ever care to admit.GREAT PARAGRAPH. Sums up all of his inner turmoil nicely. He's still a cocksucking shit, though ( ... )

arabianred June 21 2009, 00:10:08 UTC

LOL. I think making the blonde Minako would have been too much. I needed the wife to be a cold, manipulative bitch, and I didn't want to subject Minako to that. Although, it would have made an interesting story as to how she sought out Malachite.

Everyone seems to be obsessed with Rei in this series. I'm glad it threw you for a loop, though. And yeah, I think Kaidou's inaction makes him just as guilty.

And slobber all you like! ;) I'm really glad that you like it, and that the whole thing worked for you. I wasn't sure how Kaidou's obsession would be recieved.

As for R/J smut? Give me some more inspiration, girl! It's supposed to be 'Vibrator,' as a prequel to Forbidden, but it's giving me trouble. Bleh.

lovelylytton June 21 2009, 13:21:36 UTC

Although, it would have made an interesting story as to how she sought out Malachite.
Argh, now that I would have loved to read! All of the UST paired with ambition and weapons and general evilness, my mouth waters just thinking about it.

arabianred June 21 2009, 16:16:02 UTC

Ah yes, that is something I would be very tempted to write. I'm still trying to work Minako somehow into Malachite's backstory, though. And sorry, UST? ^^;

Thread 5

sea_thoughts June 21 2009, 00:48:08 UTC

Holy shit. o_o Wow, that is fucked up. *bows to you* I'm in awe of the sheer malice and perversion involved in this piece. It's like Macbeth and Lady Macbeth, only pettier.

arabianred June 21 2009, 02:05:59 UTC

Oooohh ... Shakespeare reference! I never thought of it that way, but it makes perfect sense once you've pointed it out! And yeah, it is super twisted and effed up, huh? I'm gonna take that as a compliment, though!

And, lol. Love the icon. Goes very well with the 'holy shit.'

sea_thoughts June 21 2009, 03:00:17 UTC

And yeah, it is super twisted and effed up, huh? I'm gonna take that as a compliment, though!

Oh, it's meant as one! :)

Love the icon. Goes very well with the 'holy shit.'

Thanks! It's from a British tv series "Ashes to Ashes" (yes, intentional reference to the Bowie song).

sugarcross June 21 2009, 09:26:23 UTC

Wow isn't Kaidou twisted. That revelation blew me away as I didn't see this one coming. Absolutely incredible. Now how will Rei react when she finally knows? This is going to be very interesting.

arabianred June 21 2009, 16:18:29 UTC

Yes, he IS twisted ... and so is his wife. I'm so glad this caught you by surprise and that you liked it! As for Rei's reaction, I'm still trying to figure that one out. I had something in mind initially, but that might be scrapped.

lovelylytton June 21 2009, 13:19:16 UTC

Well, I didn't see that one coming!
It's a fantastic twist, it was a complete surprise and it works even better because of it. It's safe to say that Kaidou's wife is like Lady Macbeth's little sister, but she's so twisted that it's a pleasure to read her.

arabianred June 21 2009, 16:21:01 UTC

Yay!! :D

I'm so glad (and relieved) that you like it! I was worried that it would be too transparent, or something. And yes, Kaidou's wife could put Lady Macbeth to shame. She still has a card up her sleeve, the evil woman.