After quite the writer's block, I've finally finished my essay. Since many of you are quite lovely at critiquing, I figured I'd bear it all and have you all take a look at my PS and give me any sage advice.
I'm applying to social work/mental health counseling programs, btw. It's a bit long, too. Sorry.
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I would second everything that tisiphone said. In addition, I'd say there's a lot of "preaching to the choir" going on. You don't need to tell the AdComm that adolescence is a hard time emotionally, and that sort of thing. They're the experts. Also, is there any proof that not having an adult to talk to is what has led bullied kids to commit suicide?
I would also advise that you focus more on your strengths; it seems like there's a lot about your past problems, and other peoples' problems, but not much on why you'll make a great social worker/counsellor, and why this school, specifically, should accept you.
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