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silent_five in applyingtograd

Last-minute SoP help?

Dec 15, 2010 00:55

I'm down to the wire and I've been completely stuck on how to revise my statement. This is draft number two; in my first draft I put in "a little more "SQUEE!" and a little less substance," as one of my friends put it. I've tried to add more concrete information about what I want to study, but I think I'm still a little light on the "why" ("because ( Read more... )

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Comments 3

tisiphone December 15 2010, 11:39:40 UTC

Cut the first sentence. You're applying, so it's obvious. You have some structural issues, make sure ti give it a good proofread. Otherwise, this looks good.

embarrassedrose December 15 2010, 14:33:35 UTC

I'm currently in this program. I am really sorry I don't have time to look over your SOP (must get to class), but if you have any questions, you can message me about them on here.

For what it's worth, I wrote an SOP talking about language change though with an emphasis on the Internet and got in, so your area matches their interests and vice versa.

Just a few thoughts redsaturn20 December 17 2010, 07:49:47 UTC

Your conclusion as a nice balance of squee and explanation of your reasons for wanting to study at a masters level.

"I want to gain a more current view of the social role of English, as well as a better grasp of its syntax; I hope to tie these with my historical background into a deeper investigation of language change in English. "

This sentence is awkward, it sounds as if you personally have a historical background.