my scalp is oozing from the bleach and my leg from the self-hatred

[apiphile]

there's a lot of pus here. don't feel like as much of a monster as i'd like. uncomfortably human.

atropinesulfate paid for x2 poems about fairytales and one story about werewolf girls:

FruitsThe princess looks up from her cage of thorns

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[chess]

Well, I really love all of the poems so far (sorry about the lack of individual commenting). Although you might not take that as a complement given my poetry-philistine nature...

Particularly, the strung-out and climactic bit of the first one:

and within I have a war zone
a thousand covert operatives
all lacing my words with
anti
personnel
crimes against my sanity.

coming before the knife-turn 'But I will stop you loving him.';

the imagery in the second, especially

(and an open hand
on the cheek; soft as a hurricane,
slow as lightning, a storm
to shake the words out)

but the crowbar too and I could basically just quote the whole thing as bets bits;

the rhythm (yes you know I like rhyming) in the third one and the beautiful expanding picture out to 'licked up by cats' surprising right until the end;

and I couldn't quite get the beat of this one but the framing with the bard's request for a space at the fire contrasted with the serious / philosophical content is strangely heartwarming...

[apiphile]

Jess asked for a poem about jealousy which fits in with what she's writing at the moment - a Generation Kill AU, so I thought that was appropriate. And if there's one thing I know quite well it's how delusional jealousy makes you. :D

and I couldn't quite get the beat of this one but the framing with the bard's request for a space at the fire contrasted with the serious / philosophical content is strangely heartwarming...

Yeah I buggered up the rhythm. I wanted it to be a sort of story-within-story deal like the old structure of fairytale,s but I buggered that up too. \o/ Lots of buggery.

[sparrowpunk]

Eeee, poem, thanks! I just made a noise that caused the cat to wake from her nap and fall off the sofa. And please take your time with the other poem and story, I'll be all the more thrilled when I've forgotten about them and see them after college :D

[apiphile]

Hah, it may take a while but hopefully the remainder of my debt-settling will be of a better standard.

[sparrowpunk]

I do like your stuff :)