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May 05, 2008 00:46

FIVE MEN WAYA NEVER LOVED (AND ONE HE ALWAYS WOULD)

by daisy_chan
[pivot] Five Men Waya Never Loved (And One He Always Would) )

sub: daisyface, round 005

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uminohikari May 16 2008, 02:05:56 UTC
Yang hai is sneaky~ Waya and Isumi are such boys, and I adore your characterization of them <33!

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daisy_chan February 10 2009, 03:34:34 UTC
Thank you, sweets~~

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insulynde June 13 2008, 01:20:23 UTC
Minor typo(s?) in number two, but otherwise it's simply wonderful. It's so sparse, but at the same time the way you don't mention any emotion makes it become .. charged, I guess is the word. Because we know from a little later that Waya *does* kind of like Shindou, even if he also knows that it would never happen. The way he doesn't bother to listen for the door--how he doesn't have any hope, but had sex with Shindou all the same, knowing that it probably wouldn't change anything.. I would take out the first bothering, and instead of saying "pulled the covers over him," say, "pulled the covers over himself," but these are really just minor details. ^^

It goes almost without saying that I like the other ones nearly as much (especially 1, 3, 4, and 5) XD.

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daisy_chan February 10 2009, 03:38:45 UTC
Yes, I apologize for those. I had to put this together rather at the last minute. There is an improved version on my fic comm now, so I hope you'll forgive me.

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I think it's hard for anyone, even casual sex between friends, not to involve some lingering feelings of possession, especially when there's no 'break up' (since none was needed in this case ;p). It also doesn't help that Waya is completely petty and never liked Touya much. XDD

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