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annieroo2

FIC - United Front: Ch. 6 - Water ~Renji/Ishida ~R

Aug 10, 2009 11:18

Story Title: United Front
Chapter: 6 - Water
Pairings/Characters: Abarai Renji / Ishida Uryuu, Orihime, Ichigo
Spoilers: mild spoilers for the Heuco Mundo manga arc
Warnings: angst, yaoi, language, violence
Rating: R
Word Count: 3485
Description: Ishida wakes up after dying

Beta: 2metaldog

Read: Chapter 1 Chapter 2 Chapter 3 Chapter 4 Chapter 5
( When he opened his eyes... )

renji, ishida, bleach, ichigo, renishi, fanfic

Comments 10

madrona_8 August 10 2009, 18:22:15 UTC

Heh, loving the take on the guilt trip that Ichigo is feeling. ( I've had a little fic for that running through my mind for a while now)
The confession ,even if it's only to himself, is awesome. Too bad Uryuu couldn't hear it...or did he?

annieroo2 August 13 2009, 02:39:38 UTC

Somehow Ichigo just would not stay out of this. He had to have his 2 cents, so I'm happy it went over okay.

As for Renji, well... he still has some time to get it right. ;)

Thank you so much for still following this fic after so much time. The end is in sight and there will be sex. I PROMISE.

nehalenia August 10 2009, 19:14:21 UTC

Yay, he's alive! Upset Renji was really cute, but the water-kiss was so beautiful. (And rather hot, too, even tho Ishida wasn't in any kind of shape for that sort of hotness. Poor Uryu. Unable to talk. For him, that must be it's own kind of torture.

annieroo2 August 13 2009, 02:55:47 UTC

Secret here... The water kiss... my husband totally did that for me when I was still too groggy after I had knee surgery. It was over 10 years ago, but I will never forget what that was like.

Yeah torturing Ishida, it's like a sport. Maybe they should add it to the next Olymipics. :P

Thanks so much for sticking around this long. I really appreciate the support. And I swear the end is in sight (hell I hope so!)

vayshti August 13 2009, 15:27:26 UTC

sewing clothes again, rather than body parts
*sharp intake of breath*

Love the use of scents in this piece.

Laughed my way manically through Ishida's interraction with Ichigo - he will have to sneak up on him and skewer him.

Oh and Renji - your self-deprecation and rough language will never get tiring.

xx

annieroo2 August 13 2009, 15:38:42 UTC

*hugs* Thank you woman, I think you just made my day. I think I wrote this whole chapter around that one line. So having someone notice it, makes the rest worth it.

The weird smell thing happened to me after I had surgery years ago, and I thought it might add something, especially given Ishida couldn't talk. So I'm happy this seemed to work.

And whew, I'm happy the boys didn't seem so far out there that they were no longer themselves. ;)

I'm thinking three more chapters and I can put this to bed finally. I know it's been incredibly drawn out, but I can't thank you enough for sticking with me through it. :)

hu3long2 August 19 2009, 10:33:53 UTC

Hey! *waves* Read this a while ago, but am returning for a quick sweep again and to confirm the 2 main things I love about this-- the Kurosaki-Ishida friendship. And how Ishida decides in his tight-assed way that Ichigo perhaps is really a friend after all, and that in the interests of friendship he needs to tear him a new one! Both an incredibly constipated and an incredibly compassionate declaration of friendship!
The other is Renji thinking about his love and falling for a Quincy-- cos no one else was stupid enough to do so! But Renji had to be different, and now, he's going to get it right-- showing htat he;s anything but dumb!

annieroo2 August 27 2009, 15:04:56 UTC

*laughs* I'm not sure this warranted a second read. Though it was fun to write, it really is a bit depressing and dare I say it slow.

But thank you so much for pointing out what you liked. It always tickles me endlessly to know what someone found most interesting or lovable.

I adore the snark and rivalry between Ichigo and Ishida and constantly worry that I'm not getting it quite right, so when you say that was a part you liked best, I just grinned from ear to ear. It's so important for me to get stuff right when I love it.

Oh yes, I've always contended Renji is far from dumb, some times he's just dense. There is a distinction there. *giggles*

Thank you so much for taking the time not only to read this once, but twice, and then leave such helpful comments. :D

caitriona695 March 6 2011, 23:13:04 UTC

This chapter completely rocked. You showed a lot of deapth in the characters and melded it beautifully.

Thanks for sharing

annieroo2 July 25 2011, 06:43:01 UTC

I'm stunned. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments. It really warms me to know that you like it well enough to stop for a moment and type up your remarks.

I hope to honor your comments and all the others by one day giving this story the ending it deserves.

Thank you.