Week Two: A Fool and His Gold

[annemariewrites]

The Good-Luck FishIn the tiny Vietnamese fishing village of Ben Tre Hôi the rains had finally ended, exiting far more quietly than the flash and crash of their arrival six months earlier. The villagers emerged from their bamboo-covered doorways, smiling at the sight of the season's last vibrant rainbow, which stood out in bold relief against the

Comments

[pauljoy]

Wow, this was great! I was totally in depth with the story, and you've got everything down just right!When the Fish tells the reader the moral of the story, it's not cheesy at all and perfect for children. Awesome work!

[annemariewrites]

Whew, I've rewritten the ending a hundred times because it started out WAAAAAAAAAY cheesy in that after-school special kind of way.

Thanks for reading!

[anonymous]

What a lovely, lovely fairy tale. Fingers crossed for you!

Um, and it's k-o-i not c-o-y :D

L

PS I just entered Maggie's contest!

[annemariewrites]

Oh, words, why are you so hard to spell, bb? I do know how to spell. Mostly. *le sigh*

PS: Good luck!

[watchclarewrite]

Great work, loved the ending, including the part about misguided wishes. Really captures a feeling of childhood in this.

Also, love our similar usernames. We're so cool XD

[annemariewrites]

We must have writing in our user names! Otherwise, how will anyone know what we do? ;)

Thanks for reading! (It's taking me so long to get through all the entries. You and rephen are pretty amazing! I see your comments everywhere.)

[rephen]

Im glad they learnt a valuable lesson. A valuable, expensive lesson. I like the ending very much, it's delivered well and it closes with a positive message. Well done.

Wish I can find a Good Luck Fish of my own now...

[annemariewrites]

I want one too. I have a bowl and food and everything. All I want is to write for a living. Is that too much to ask? Ha!

Thanks for reading and giving so much support. I notice both you and watchclairewrite are commenting fools! :D

[sobitxx]

Wow, I liked this a lot. [: It delivered like an old tale mothers tell their children, but it was very warm and comfortable, not like lame and awkward, yeah? I liked your word choices too.

[annemariewrites]

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I always feel like I force dialogue and such to read in a very archaic fashion. Especially when I'm writing about other cultures! But, I'm glad this read well. :D

(PS: LOVE LOVE LOVE your icon. Paris is one of my fav cities in the world!)

[sobitxx]

Haha, me too! I want to go to Paris... & London... :P

[annemariewrites]

DO IT! The more you travel the more you'll have to write about. ;)