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Week Two: A Fool and His Gold

Feb 14, 2010 02:34

The Good-Luck FishIn the tiny Vietnamese fishing village of Ben Tre Hôi the rains had finally ended, exiting far more quietly than the flash and crash of their arrival six months earlier. The villagers emerged from their bamboo-covered doorways, smiling at the sight of the season's last vibrant rainbow, which stood out in bold relief against the ( Read more... )

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shadowrain February 17 2010, 00:53:19 UTC

I loved this. :D

Culture for the win. I loved the description of the fish, and the children's responses to it.

annemariewrites February 17 2010, 04:11:56 UTC

YAY! I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for reading :D :D

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Re: editor reporting for duty annemariewrites February 17 2010, 23:03:51 UTC

THANKS FOR THE EDIT!

Footnotes: Actually, this is a personal pet peeve of mine. I know that in traditional publishing (that is, books) the footnote would be at the bottom of the page. However, in today's age when you can scroll down for ages before getting to the bottom of an entry, I also put footnotes in a [small] font under the paragraph. One day everyone will do it, but until then ... it's just me and my odd quirks. :D

Edit! Part 1 jewelsverne February 19 2010, 02:15:27 UTC

Hi there! I’m Jewels, your second editor for this piece. This is a very strong, engaging, well-written story, and it was a pleasure to read! Most of my edits have to do with punctuation, but there are a few regarding content as well. Please let me know if you have any questions. Without further ado, on to the edits ( ... )

Re: Edit! Part 2 jewelsverne February 19 2010, 02:15:52 UTC

[“I also wish for a pushchair, a dress to match my doll’s dress, and a new pair of shoes ( ... )

Re: Edit! Part 2 annemariewrites February 20 2010, 02:35:30 UTC

THANKS FOR THE EDIT!!

If the fish comes alive again, I think it'll be in that Eastern religion kind of rebirth. His essence is there, but the body is long dead.

Here's wishing I can write something worth Week Three! Thanks so much for your help with this one.

vyvyan_wilde February 23 2010, 00:37:18 UTC

That was a sweet story. Well, maybe a little bittersweet too.. But it wasn't at all over-the top and had the perfect tone for a children's story. I think it had a great message at the end :)

annemariewrites February 23 2010, 20:26:00 UTC

Thanks for the ROAR. ;)