Fic: Sentinel, part III - Iron Man

Jun 01, 2008 12:31

Okay. It's amazing how many of the ideas I was discussing in a thread of doom with
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gabby_silang June 1 2008, 18:08:55 UTC
He paused mid-stride at the top of the stairs, his attention darting between her and Rhodey, before venturing further into the room, his exuberance smoothing over into something more controlled and bland.I am so in love with how you incorporate all this telling, nuanced character stuff into the narrative. This in particular is such an amazing example, so much about him in just that tiny moment, not limited to this scene at all, something that holds true for him all the time ( ... )

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amonitrate June 1 2008, 18:22:14 UTC
I am so in love with how you incorporate all this telling, nuanced character stuff into the narrative.

Thank you. You don't know how gratifying it is to hear that.

I've loved all the parts of this story, the restraint you're showing, actually, is great, in letting things happen naturally

I'm really glad this is still working. I thought this part was more expository and I was hoping it didn't lose the understated thing I was going for in the first two parts. So thank you for letting me know!

He's the medical Tony, basically, and that's pretty fascinating, especially considering what he's like as opposed to what Tony's like, and how their differing backgrounds influences that.

Oh wow, I hadn't thought of him like that. Yeah! I mean, if you're going to stick with the reality of the story and suspend disbelief that Tony Stark could have even survived that kind of surgery, this is how it makes sense. Neat.

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ithildyn June 1 2008, 18:31:41 UTC

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amonitrate June 1 2008, 18:32:29 UTC
thank you! Hope it makes up for you getting crushed the other day when I reposted part II.

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ithildyn June 1 2008, 18:35:23 UTC
I'm recovering nicely, thank you [g]

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amonitrate June 1 2008, 19:03:50 UTC
oh hey, thanks for the icon!

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quigonejinn June 1 2008, 18:40:08 UTC
THE TENSION BETWEEN TONY AND RHODEY. OMG.

Seriously. That alone would make it worth it, but I seriously made this retarded squeaking noise when I realized how cleverly you were playing it out. And the way you describe the suits. And how well you convey the texture of Pepper's job. And.

And agreed with dafnap of the Hive Mind. We want more stories about Yinsen. We want many, many more stories about Yinsen.

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amonitrate June 1 2008, 19:05:16 UTC
thanks! I really worked hard on that tension, it went through about three drafts before it worked. I'm happy you liked it!

I want more stories about Yinsen too. If I wasn't working on this I'd love to work on a story about Yinsen and Tony in the cave.

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quigonejinn June 1 2008, 19:42:05 UTC
GAH. By dafnap, I mean gabby_silang. Man, I am full of the suck (and the hive brain.)

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sienamystic June 1 2008, 23:40:31 UTC
Yes, yes we do. Immediately.

I'd write more coherently but instead I think I'll just *flail* since I'm so in love with this story.

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cruelest_month June 1 2008, 19:10:43 UTC
Wow these first three parts are terrific and so well-written. I love all the interactions between Tony and Pepper and Rhodes, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

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amonitrate June 1 2008, 19:39:24 UTC
thank you!

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captain_elessar June 1 2008, 19:11:25 UTC
I really love your writing, you have such a way of describing the characters and it's always new which is awesome. I'm looking forward for more :D. More about Yinsen too, I loved him, he was awesome.

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amonitrate June 1 2008, 19:39:35 UTC
Thank you very much.

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