Fic: Close Encounters, SGA, NC-17, McKay/Sheppard

[amific]

Title: Close Encounters
Author: Amireal
Rating: NC-17
Length: Approx 4500 words.
Notes: Well this was... wish fulfillment for me, it's crack like, but not fully crack. Thanks to seperis for the beta and the bitchslaps. Also thanks to fairestcat who went over it and found the four apparently *glaring* errors that were hoarding other people's enjoyment for themselves

Comments

[_minxy_]

I caught this typo: feelings lungs move air. I think you mean "feeling HIS lungs move air. But enough of that.

Loooooved the long, slow build. Loved the Not Talking and denial which was absolutely in character. Loved that John was still freaking out even at the end but that no one else was, except Rodney.

Because that's totally how it should be. The two people involved are nervous and freak out, everyone else thinks either 'Yay!' or 'it's about time!'

*glee* Very nice.

[amireal]

Fixed. I think.

Denial those men don't know *how* to speak openly. I think the end of Trinity was as close as they'd ever come.

I think people totally miss out on the fun of writing a quiet freakout.

Thanks for the feedback!

[ship_recs]

Wow. That was beautiful.

I love this part:
"Wha?" His eyelids flutters softly, and he leans into John's touch for a brief moment before the fog clears and he shakes his head roughly, dislodging John's hand.

It's an instantaneous understanding, that Rodney is Rodney and that whatever this is he has for John is part of him, and he's bound and determined not to let it change them. So John lets go and settles back into bed. "Looks like we were both tired."

[amireal]

I liked that part too.

*grins*

Thanks!

[fatuorum]

*happy squeeing* How much do I love the build up?? Them saving each other and freaking out, and you did a fab job with the showing and not telling. The last line was a perfect wrap up.

He falls asleep in the middle of Troy. Rodney said sometimes science fiction

This is slightly confusing though, because at first I read it as Troy = science fiction, which is boring and that's why John fell asleep and that really doesn't make sense.

[amireal]

I think I changed the structure of that sentence.

Thanks, I'm glad you liked!

[spike21]

oh NICE!!! I love this.

[amireal]

YAY!

Thanks!

[amireal]

*bows* We may have talked about this already, but yay!