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Office fic: i won't be rising from these ashes

May 22, 2007 16:46

Title: i won't be rising from these ashes
Author: allibabab
Rating: M/R
Word Count: 958
Spoilers: Not really? It takes place after Casino Night.
Summary: This was taking what you could get. (Jim/Jan)
A/N: Thanks to my ladies for all their help! This is also my first time writing Jan (and Jim/Jan, obviously), so I hope I did the character credit. I ( Read more... )

fanfiction, writing, the office

Comments 21

broken__records May 22 2007, 21:56:32 UTC

I have this odd love for Jim and Jan. But love isn't really the right word. It's just- An interesting dynamic to explore and you've done that so beautifully here. The atmosphere you create is so dark and textured and quiet and just so wonderfully fitting to the situation. The lights and the smoke and the skin. And I love the conflict going on inside Jan's head about whether or not she really regrets this or not, whether it was okay even as a mistake. And just- Ugh. I love pretty much everything about this and it's hard to say what's in my head. But.

Yes. This was amazing.

allibabab May 29 2007, 19:20:53 UTC

This comment makes me so happy. I'm so glad the atmosphere was strong for you -- that's really what created this whole piece for me, the idea of shadows and skin and an almost black and white feel.

So. Thank you!

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allibabab May 29 2007, 19:23:08 UTC

Hahaha. Somehow I can't see Pam smoking much. ;)

Thanks so much for your comment. I'm so glad to hear you liked the Michael flashback -- that was something that really just flew out of me while I was writing this and I was nervous about including it just because- for a lot of reasons. But I still liked it and I included it and you liked it, so I'm happy.

Thanks again. :)

paper_jam11 May 23 2007, 02:04:17 UTC

OMG! Jim/Jan! Maybe my favourite story I've ever written myself was Jim/Jan, so yay for more in the world. What a nice treat from you!

The tone of this was beautiful, I could really feel the smoke and wanted to squint in the darkness. I loved how the lighting (pieces here and there, almost fluctuating) worked so well with Jan's scattered thoughts. The texture is gorgeous.

allibabab May 29 2007, 19:25:43 UTC

Thank you so much! I worked hard on the texture and the lighting, as you call them, so I'm so happy to hear that they came through. That was really what prompted me -- the idea of Jim and Jan and a dark motel room -- so it's great that you saw to the center of the idea.

Thanks again. :)

fadsy May 23 2007, 02:45:01 UTC

This is excellent, and beautifully written. You really captured Jan's confusion and gloom.

allibabab May 29 2007, 19:26:14 UTC

Thank you so much!

pennylane83 May 23 2007, 13:13:14 UTC

Oooh, very nice! Jim/Jan are one of those wonderful "maybe, what if...YES" pairings because of the situations they were both in on Casino Night. You really captured Jan- her regret that's not really regret, because she know it's a mistake but she'll move on. This was very beautifully written!

allibabab May 29 2007, 19:28:12 UTC

Thank you!

Casino Night is what prompted everything. That scene in the parking lot (of course; everything happens in that parking lot) just screamed to me, and then I got this idea of a dark room and smoke and skin and, well, this came out. I'm so happy you liked it.

pennylane83 May 29 2007, 23:32:20 UTC

You're welcome! Do you mind if I friend you? We seem to have some friends and interests in common and I really like your fic!

allibabab May 30 2007, 00:31:14 UTC

I don't mind at all! I love new friends. :)