Office fic: i won't be rising from these ashes

[allibabab]

Title: i won't be rising from these ashes
Author: allibabab
Rating: M/R
Word Count: 958
Spoilers: Not really? It takes place after Casino Night.
Summary: This was taking what you could get. (Jim/Jan)
A/N: Thanks to my ladies for all their help! This is also my first time writing Jan (and Jim/Jan, obviously), so I hope I did the character credit. I

Comments

[mcmuffins_js]

Ok, um, seriously? You are amazing. You write so beautifully! I love the abstract yet visceral feeling of your stories. Sigh.

[allibabab]

Okay, um, seriously? "Abstract yet visceral"? I think that's one of the best (and most eloquent!) compliments I've gotten on my writing. Thank you so much!

[mcmuffins_js]

Wheee, thanks! :)

[allibabab]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it.

[violet4120]

Oh, Jan. This is amazing; it has such a bleak and lonely tone that works so well for this pairing.

[allibabab]

Yes, exactly- that's just what I was trying to get across, especially in that last line. It's not about connection, it's about filling yourself with whatever you can. I'm so glad that idea came through for you.

Thanks so much for your comment. ♥

[yippee17]

Augh, this is good. You captured such a film noirish atmosphere. I kind of automatically pictured them in black & white while I was reading.

Love that this wasn't quite comfort sex - it was something more (or less?) than that. A byproduct of Jim's tendency for using other people when he's in pain, and Jan's own self-esteem issues and neuroses. Jan's running commentary was perfect for this - her uncertainty over whether or not it was a mistake felt so right.

And her thinking about how she didn't come and he did, and how the picture frame was actually hurting her, but she would have let things continue just hurt to read. They really underscored the almost meanness of this - it wasn't comforting and sweet, it was taking what you could get and raw, but not necessarily a mistake. Loved.

[allibabab]

I didn't know the word, but I understood the concept, and you're exactly right -- film noir is what I was going for. I'm so thrilled to hear that came through for you because that's something I felt was strong in this piece.

And you've just hit the nail on the head with what I was trying to illustrate about the meanness of the situation. It's taking what you could get and filling yourself with something and maybe not a step forward but at least not a step back- I kind of like that there's no resolution, no ease in the beginning, middle, or end. I think that works for the situation they're in.

And your thoughtful comment has now got me rambling, so I'll stop. Thanks so much for your kind words.

[miss_bennie]

Okay, so this is super late, but I am a horrible feedbacker and am trying to catch up - and you (this) was first on my list, because YOU.

I know that you were nervous about tackling a pairing other than Jim/Pam, and I honestly don't know why because this is just perfect perfect post-CN Jim/Jan - the loneliness, the almost quiet desperation, and the resignation are all palpable, and as always, it's written just beautifully. Because at that moment, they are mirrors of each other, and just fit; and like the last line says(killing me), it won't happen again. They're just...colliding because it works at the moment. Just gorgeous. <3 I hope you plan on writing a lot more this summer!

(And sorry, again, that it took me so long to leave you feedback.)

[allibabab]

Don't apologize! I love that you took the time to reply so thoughtfully, and that matters a lot more than commenting the moment I put this up. :)

So. Thank you! I'm so happy to hear the idea of them colliding, as you say, just in this moment, just this once, works for you because, really, what other time have they ever had together where it was charged like it was during CN? It was just this situation and now it's over. I guess I just kind of like the idea of it. :)

Anyway. Thanks again! ♥