Oh, and the repetition of "Promise me" is so haunting! I encourage you to make use of it again and again and again. Oh yay! I wasn't sure if anyone was going to remember that from a few chapters ago. That's not the end of those words - or the meaning behind them.
Whoa shit I obviously did something right today because OMFG!!!!! ADONIS FIC!!!!!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!
There is so much in this I love! I love that the hint that Adonis was going to go batshit came to fruition and he's so goddamn ice cold cruel! This line: Didn’t the little prince know that there is always someone to hear a tree when it falls in the woods?DAMN GOOD. Loved it. I really love your description of Zoicite and how bust up and wrecked he is...you've got a real talent for describing a certain element and using just the right words so that the reader can *exactly* picture what you're describing in their mind's eye. The ending paragraph was spot fucking on..I could FEEL his pain. What happened? Why is he still upright if he's so injured? Is Adonis doing it to him
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Whoa shit I obviously did something right today because OMFG!!!!! ADONIS FIC!!!!!!!! The thought of the next Economics chapter inspired me to continue. :) (Now go write!!! *nudges*)
The ending paragraph was spot fucking on..I could FEEL his pain. What happened? Why is he still upright if he's so injured? Is Adonis doing it to him?? I can't wait till I get to explain that part. Not that that's going to be an easy explanation or anything....(why do I keep digging myself into deeper and deeper into this story?)
Speaking of Adonis: let me get this out of my system first.
"FUCK YOU FOR TORTURING ZOI! PIGFUCKER!" I think we can all safely assume that Adonis will no longer be hiding in your closet. :)
THe transformation from aspiring rookie to love's bitchThis is soooooo my new tagline for this series. This might even be my new journal name I like it so much. Of course it's no "Gah! Kunz is a sex beast!", but a close runner up all the same.
I'll quote wohever said: SHIT JUST GOT REAL!Please please please please tell me that you've
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You crack me up. Seriously I'm so glad I'm friends with you and a loyal reader no less. Tonight I'm going to get started on your Venus story. I'll try to send you the revised stuff no later than Saturday night or possibly Sunday night.
No one questioned that his nearly fatal injuries were healed within days.
No one spoke of his ever lingering presence around the injured soldier that they held in highest regard.
Because he's evil! In my mind, he's always been a bit unhinged but now he has just lost it. And the fact that Kunzite is not back (I refuse to believe that he's dead) doesn't exactly heighten the public's feeling of security, does it now?
Poor Zoi to be tortured so! And stupid, blind, silly, annyoing Endymion has no idea what is transpiring before his very own eyes. Also, he should really stand on a balcony and wave once or twice to calm his people.
I loved this chapter, even though I wasn't able to say anything remotely constructive in the comment, but you now that I loved it. And now bring back Kunz. *laughs
Because he's evil! In my mind, he's always been a bit unhinged but now he has just lost it. I'm willing to bet that he just needs a hug. :)
And the fact that Kunzite is not back (I refuse to believe that he's dead) doesn't exactly heighten the public's feeling of security, does it now? Gah! I want to say what happened to Kunzite (or where exactly he is depending on how you look at it) - but it's just not fair that I don't think I'm going to be able to get that part into this fic or not....
Poor Zoi to be tortured so! He's definitely going to need a couple hugs after this chapter.
And stupid, blind, silly, annyoing Endymion has no idea what is transpiring before his very own eyes Mums the word....
Now I'm off to finish some annoying side projects so that I can get back to writing the next chapter. I have a LOT of explaining to do. (Plus I still have to make up a list of my works in progress because you inspired me to do so and I've been obsessing about starting it for some time now....)
And stupid, blind, silly, annyoing Endymion has no idea what is transpiring before his very own eyes Mums the word....
WHOA! THIS KIND OF SUPPORTS ONE OF MY THEORIES ON WHAT HAPPENED. Except this Theory has Kunzite being dead, sorry, Lytton. Well, all my theories have Kunzite being dead in "Et tu, ********?" manner.
Now just keep an eye out for the crazy Venusian. Even since VO1 kicked him out of her closet he's been a little more off than usual....
Dude, I heard he ate some hipster and nearly choked on his thrift-store scarf and ironic tshirt.
I'm willing to bet that he just needs a hug. Kunzite might need a hug occasionally so that he doesn't get too stern, Endymion might need a hug so he grows some spine, Venus might need a hug just because but Adonis needs a good old kick in the rear. *huffs*
but it's just not fair that I don't think I'm going to be able to get that part into this fic *has a heart attack* WHAT? But...but...but... *sniffs* Kunzite!
(Plus I still have to make up a list of my works in progress because you inspired me to do so and I've been obsessing about starting it for some time now....) Yay to the list! I completely support lists of any kind :)
Now just keep an eye out for the crazy Venusian. Even since VO1 kicked him out of her closet he's been a little more off than usual... I'll have Spock the Airmail dog guard me and if push comes to shove, I'll hide with Kunz in your closet.
I thought I'd commented on this but obviously not! o.o Please forgive me.
You really make me feel for Zoisite here, as it's obvious that Adonis has lost all vestige of humanity and has now become a cold-blooded parasite, corrupting those he feeds off. Zoisite's pain and anguish are very real, and his last effort to protect Endymion moved me almost to tears.
That's ok - you gave me pre-posting feedback. I liked your recommended addition about Adonis's dislike for unpredictability. Made such a difference to the intro.
I'm glad you liked the final version. You describe Adonis to a T - he really seems to have lost the last vestiges of his humanity.
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Oh, and the repetition of "Promise me" is so haunting! I encourage you to make use of it again and again and again.
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Oh, and the repetition of "Promise me" is so haunting! I encourage you to make use of it again and again and again.
Oh yay! I wasn't sure if anyone was going to remember that from a few chapters ago. That's not the end of those words - or the meaning behind them.
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AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!
There is so much in this I love! I love that the hint that Adonis was going to go batshit came to fruition and he's so goddamn ice cold cruel! This line:
Didn’t the little prince know that there is always someone to hear a tree when it falls in the woods?DAMN GOOD. Loved it. I really love your description of Zoicite and how bust up and wrecked he is...you've got a real talent for describing a certain element and using just the right words so that the reader can *exactly* picture what you're describing in their mind's eye. The ending paragraph was spot fucking on..I could FEEL his pain. What happened? Why is he still upright if he's so injured? Is Adonis doing it to him ( ... )
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The thought of the next Economics chapter inspired me to continue. :) (Now go write!!! *nudges*)
The ending paragraph was spot fucking on..I could FEEL his pain. What happened? Why is he still upright if he's so injured? Is Adonis doing it to him??
I can't wait till I get to explain that part. Not that that's going to be an easy explanation or anything....(why do I keep digging myself into deeper and deeper into this story?)
Speaking of Adonis: let me get this out of my system first.
"FUCK YOU FOR TORTURING ZOI! PIGFUCKER!"
I think we can all safely assume that Adonis will no longer be hiding in your closet. :)
THe transformation from aspiring rookie to love's bitchThis is soooooo my new tagline for this series. This might even be my new journal name I like it so much. Of course it's no "Gah! Kunz is a sex beast!", but a close runner up all the same.
I'll quote wohever said: SHIT JUST GOT REAL!Please please please please tell me that you've ( ... )
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No one questioned that his nearly fatal injuries were healed within days.
No one spoke of his ever lingering presence around the injured soldier that they held in highest regard.
Because he's evil! In my mind, he's always been a bit unhinged but now he has just lost it. And the fact that Kunzite is not back (I refuse to believe that he's dead) doesn't exactly heighten the public's feeling of security, does it now?
Poor Zoi to be tortured so! And stupid, blind, silly, annyoing Endymion has no idea what is transpiring before his very own eyes. Also, he should really stand on a balcony and wave once or twice to calm his people.
I loved this chapter, even though I wasn't able to say anything remotely constructive in the comment, but you now that I loved it. And now bring back Kunz.
*laughs
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I'm willing to bet that he just needs a hug. :)
And the fact that Kunzite is not back (I refuse to believe that he's dead) doesn't exactly heighten the public's feeling of security, does it now?
Gah! I want to say what happened to Kunzite (or where exactly he is depending on how you look at it) - but it's just not fair that I don't think I'm going to be able to get that part into this fic or not....
Poor Zoi to be tortured so!
He's definitely going to need a couple hugs after this chapter.
And stupid, blind, silly, annyoing Endymion has no idea what is transpiring before his very own eyes
Mums the word....
Now I'm off to finish some annoying side projects so that I can get back to writing the next chapter. I have a LOT of explaining to do.
(Plus I still have to make up a list of my works in progress because you inspired me to do so and I've been obsessing about starting it for some time now....)
Glad you liked this chapter. :)
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Mums the word....
WHOA! THIS KIND OF SUPPORTS ONE OF MY THEORIES ON WHAT HAPPENED. Except this Theory has Kunzite being dead, sorry, Lytton. Well, all my theories have Kunzite being dead in "Et tu, ********?" manner.
Now just keep an eye out for the crazy Venusian. Even since VO1 kicked him out of her closet he's been a little more off than usual....
Dude, I heard he ate some hipster and nearly choked on his thrift-store scarf and ironic tshirt.
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Kunzite might need a hug occasionally so that he doesn't get too stern, Endymion might need a hug so he grows some spine, Venus might need a hug just because but Adonis needs a good old kick in the rear.
*huffs*
but it's just not fair that I don't think I'm going to be able to get that part into this fic
*has a heart attack*
WHAT? But...but...but...
*sniffs*
Kunzite!
(Plus I still have to make up a list of my works in progress because you inspired me to do so and I've been obsessing about starting it for some time now....)
Yay to the list! I completely support lists of any kind :)
Now just keep an eye out for the crazy Venusian. Even since VO1 kicked him out of her closet he's been a little more off than usual...
I'll have Spock the Airmail dog guard me and if push comes to shove, I'll hide with Kunz in your closet.
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You really make me feel for Zoisite here, as it's obvious that Adonis has lost all vestige of humanity and has now become a cold-blooded parasite, corrupting those he feeds off. Zoisite's pain and anguish are very real, and his last effort to protect Endymion moved me almost to tears.
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I'm glad you liked the final version. You describe Adonis to a T - he really seems to have lost the last vestiges of his humanity.
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